Name: Cloudypaw/fang

Cute name (+5)

Name reason: cuz he fluff and white like le cloud

Thats cute(+5)

Gender: Male

Pronouns: he/him

Sexuality: Unknown

That's fine

Appearance: Fluffy white tom-cat with light blue eyes and a long tail.

Thats cute(+4)

Personality: Rude, bossy, teasing, kind of a bully honestly.

Okay(+9)

Clan: NewtClan (in my book. Idk, it's a single Clan)

Wish you have me some detail about the surrounds but I've never heard of a clan with that name, interesting(+3)

Kin: Gingerpaw/leaf, Dewbush,

Willowspeck

Cool names. (+5)

Friends: none

Thats sad(+4)

Likes: Not much

So, he doesn't prefer a type of prey? He doesn't like hunting, or fighting, okay(+1)

Dislikes: a lot of things. Including his family and sister.

Alright, makes sense(+3)

Strengths: none rlly

He doesn't excel at anything?(+1)

Weaknesses: He's super annoying :) if that even counts.

It does count as a weakness, I can see why he doesn't have friends(+4)

Backstory: He grew up with his sister, Gingerpaw, who had a dead leg. He was embarrassed by it and decided she wasn't his sister. His father was the medicine cat, and was kicked out of the Clan for having a mate and kits. His mother ran away one day, due to Gingerpaw.

When he was an apprentice, he was out in the woods and got attacked by a badger.

His sister and an elder named Honeyspots saved him, but he died from blood loss.

A bit short, but gets to the point. I like it(+10)

He never lived to be a warrior, but he got his warrior name anyway.

Thats nice

Final score: 52 points

It's good, but you could expand on it.

-Add a little onto the personality, it's short and you could expand on it a bit.

-I know it's hard to add detail to things, I struggle with it too.

-But try to expand on the details of the appearance.

-Give the Clan some detail. (Type of prey they eat, surrounding territory,are they in the woods, is there a nearby water source, what's life like, background of its creation?)

-add something with the likes, everyone likes something

-dislikes, it makes sense for his character, what expand on it for a bit

-Everyone has strengths, he has to excel at something. Something he can do a bit better than others

He's great, I really like him. Think about my suggestions, because there's always room for improvement.

WarriorCats4Life62