Title: The Lady in the Weeping Mansion
Author: BrutalRice
Genre/Subgenre: YA Fantasy

Blurb:

7 Souls; 5 Boss ; 3 Lords; 2 Legends

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The mystical empire of Cinderdell serves as the homeland of the ever-powerful Spirit Users, who operate under the watchful eyes of the 3 Lords; their existence unknown to the co-existing non-spirit users, whose population exceeds 90% of the entire continent.

The rebellious 15-year old flame user, Kaizen and his unusually timid 12-year old friend, Saito, goes on a mission to the ancient Kingdom of Batilda, in the hopes of untangling the mysteries surrounding the 7 Silent Souls.

But things took for a drastic turn: Batilda is in a complete chaos-- Thousands of missing people, mass breakout of vile fugitives and whatnot, the otherworldly midnight screams from the esoteric Royal Palace that haunts the entire Kingdom.

Rather than 'Will our MCs BEAT the bad guys?', it's better to ask, 'Will our MCs BECOME the bad guys?'

Choosing the right side proves to be the most difficult task.

Is it better to trust the revenge driven ex-royal guard?

OR

Is it better to trust the kind princess who murdered thousands of lives, both innocent and guilty?

Read more to find out about the 'Right' side...if...there is one!

Reviewer: 🌹BrittneyStar

Review:

Title: 5/5
The title is excellent. It is a bit lengthy, but it does draw the eye and make you curious as to what it is about.

Cover: 5/5
Your cover is beautiful. I do like your new one better than the last, but they were both beautiful. This one fits the title a bit better, though.

Blurb: 4/5
The blurb did a good job. I like the numbers at the start, it draws people in. It did give me the info I would need going into the story and left with a cliffhanger.

Spelling, Punctuation, Grammar, and Vocabulary: 13/15
I didn't notice any issues with spelling, punctuation, grammar, or vocabulary that was wrong. Some of your sentences were structured oddly, especially for a YA. And some of your word choice isn't something I would recommend for a YA. Now this is purely going off the fact that it is tagged as teen fiction.

World-building and Descriptions: 10/10
The world is interesting. It was well developed in the chapters I did read and I hope it is continued to be developed as the story goes on.

Character Development: 19/20
It was nice reading your characters. Your characters were set up nicely in the chapters I read and I hope that as they progress they continue to grow and find their path in this world. I like the main characters interactions with each other, when we did get it.

Plot Development/Pacing/Chapter Structure: 19/20
The plot is interesting. I liked the intro of Saito to the plot. I am not sure if this is where I put this, but it kind of hit hard the way you described someone in their 30s, but I also know, in the mind of a teen, 30 is ancient. You did well in the setup part of the plot. The pacing was a bit slow for me, but the chapters were a good length.

Originality: 10/10
I will admit, I don't read much YA fantasy. This does seem interesting and different than anything I have read before.

Enjoyment/Hook: 10/10
The blurb hooked me in. The first chapter was a bit slow going, but very well written, so I still enjoyed it. Over all, it was well executed.

Total: 95/100