Glow | BNHA Various by CasualHavok

Chapters Reviewed: 4 + Prologue

Critic: Kyrpto

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Okay so I'm quite familiar to CasualHavok's fanfiction, "GLOW" actually having read a bit of the old version as well, but I do love this book so much and I'll try my best to give the best feedback I possibly can give!

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┊blurb & prologue review

┊i. one

┊ii. two

┊iii. three

┊iv. four

┊v. overall reviewㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ

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I'm going to begin with the blurb of the book, (even though it isn't part of the book, I still think it's quite important as this is what, in most cases, makes people read the book!)

The blurb for "Glow | BNHA Various" definitely shines with promise and creativity, our protagonist, (L/n) (Y/n), steps into her destiny. The description of her as the "failure of her clan" adds an underdog charm that immediately makes me personally want to root for her and I feel most people will feel the same as well, as a lot of people can relate to that. Also, the reference to Raiden Shogun's design from "Genshin Impact" is a delightful touch for fans of the game - this is also because not only does it appeal to fans of Genshin Impact but also provides a visual point for the character of Y/n. This blurb is a wonderful invitation to an adventure filled with gods, power, and self-realization, and it leaves us eager to join (L/n) (Y/n) on her remarkable journey!

While the blurb is amazing, one thing could be improved is adding an engaging hook, this could include adding a sentence or phrase that acts as a hook to grab the reader's attention immediately. This could be a dramatic statement or question which increases the chances of the reader reading the book! (e.g "Can (L/n) (Y/n) harness the godlike power within her to rewrite the fate of her clan, or will she succumb to the shadows of her past?")

PROLOGUE | "FOREVER IS FANTASY"

The prologue of "Forever is a Fantasy" is an amazing and masterful introduction to a world teeming with layers of complexity and moral ambiguity. It begins with a reflection on the weightiness of life, particularly for those born into the esteemed (L/n) clan. This clan, shrouded in history and revered for their heroic exploits, stands as a bastion of honor and virtue, or so it seems.

The vivid description of the (L/n) clan as a name "forged with courage and tempered with integrity" evokes an image of a lineage steeped in noble tradition. However, it's in the subsequent lines that the true nature of this clan begins to unfurl. The juxtaposition of their outward prestige with the hidden sins beneath the surface paints a compelling picture of a society grappling with its own dark secrets.

The prose gracefully navigates the dichotomy of perception and reality, as the clan elders manipulate their descendants into becoming heroes, all while concealing a more sinister truth. This serves as a striking commentary on the manipulation of power and the sacrifices made for the greater good, or at least what is perceived as such.

Hikari and (Y/n), as central characters, emerge as symbols of innocence in the face of this insidious narrative. Hikari's early manifestation of a potent quirk, his parents' reluctance to submit him to the clan's demands, and their subsequent decision to sever ties with the clan, all showcase the family's defiance against a system they find oppressive.

The introduction of (Y/n) adds another layer to the narrative. Her birth, four years after Hikari, marks the continuation of this struggle against the clan's influence. Her parents' determination to shield her and Hikari from the elders' machinations is a testament to their unwavering love and commitment to their children's well-being.

The dynamic between Hikari and (Y/n) is a poignant exploration of sibling bonds. The occasional bickering and declarations of "I hate you" are juxtaposed with a profound underlying respect and admiration. (Y/n)'s aspiration to become a hero in her brother's image speaks volumes about her devotion to him, while Hikari's desire to protect his family fuels his determination to become a hero.

The turning point of the prologue arrives with Hikari's overhearing of a conversation between his father and an elder of the clan. The raw emotion in his father's refusal to allow Hikari to pursue heroism is palpable, setting the stage for Hikari's internal turmoil and eventual confrontation.

The subsequent exchange between father and son is a masterclass in emotional writing. Hikari's outburst of "I hate you" is a gut-wrenching moment, illustrating the complexities of familial relationships. The aftermath, marked by Hikari's restless night and his yearning for reconciliation, is a poignant exploration of regret and the desire for acceptance.

The fateful birthday outing takes a tragic turn with the explosion at the mall. The chaos and danger are vividly depicted, evoking a sense of urgency and fear. The revelation of (Y/n)'s mother's fate, along with Hikari's father's valiant attempts to shield his children, adds a layer of heart-wrenching sorrow to the narrative.

The prologue culminates in a powerful realization: "forever is a fantasy." This statement encapsulates the harsh truth Hikari confronts at such a tender age, that in a world rife with superhuman abilities and hidden agendas, permanence is but an illusion.

But while the prologue excels in many aspects, there are opportunities for further exploration of sensory details to immerse the reader even more deeply into the world. Additionally, providing a bit more context on the broader societal backdrop could enhance the reader's understanding of the challenges faced by the characters.

Overall, the prologue of "Forever is a Fantasy" is a tour de force of storytelling. The intricate character dynamics, the exploration of moral ambiguity, and the evocative prose all work in harmony to create a captivating narrative that leaves the reader eager for more. This prologue is a promising foundation for what is sure to be an enthralling tale.

CHAPTER 101 | "LOST IN TIME"

"Lost in Time" opens with a captivating exploration of reality and perception, emphasizing the subjective nature of our experiences. While the prose is beautifully written, there's a risk of it becoming overly introspective. Striking a balance between philosophical musings and concrete narrative elements could enhance the reader's engagement.

The metaphor of "broken frames of subconsciousness" is a powerful one, vividly conveying the vulnerability of the human psyche. But, there's a chance to expand on the consequences of these broken frames, delving into how they shape Hikari's worldview and actions.

The tragic event at the mall is depicted with striking emotional resonance. The visceral description of Hikari's father's sacrifice effectively conveys the horror and devastation of the moment, if you explored Hikari's emotional turmoil even further, the readers can fully empathize with his grief and shock.

The confrontation with the clan elders is a pivotal moment in the chapter. Hikari's defiance adds depth to his character, showcasing his inner strength. However, the elders' manipulation tactics could be further nuanced. Adding layers to their motivations and methods would heighten the tension and complexity of the scene.

The introduction of Nazokake introduces an intriguing setting, but further exploration of the town's history and significance to the clan could enrich the world-building. Providing context for Nazokake's role in Hikari's journey could enhance its narrative importance.

The dynamic between Hikari and (Y/n) is a heartwarming aspect of the chapter. Their sibling bond is portrayed with genuine tenderness, offering a poignant contrast to the harsh realities they face.But don't forget to explore their different and individual personalities and how they complement and support one another.

In summary, "Lost in Time" is a promising opening chapter with a richly evocative narrative. Balancing philosophical contemplation with concrete narrative elements, delving deeper into character emotions, and further developing the world-building are areas where the chapter could be expanded. Additionally, exploring the nuances of the clan elders' characters and motivations would elevate the tension and complexity of the confrontation scene. Overall, this chapter shows great potential and leaves readers eager for more.

CHAPTER 102 | "OF FLAMES AND FROST"

Chapter 2 continues to paint a vivid and emotionally charged picture of Hikari and (Y/n)'s lives in the challenging world of hero training. The stark contrast between their vulnerability and the elders' unyielding demands is skillfully portrayed, creating a palpable tension that drives the narrative forward.

The introduction of Matsumoto and Akahiro serves as a powerful contrast to the harsh treatment the siblings receive from the elders. Matsumoto's act of defiance with the chocolates is a poignant symbol of resistance against the elders' authoritarian rule. It's a touching moment that highlights the significance of small gestures in the face of oppression.

The arrival of Todoroki introduces a new layer of complexity to the story. His interaction with (Y/n) offers a glimpse into his own intricate family dynamics, which resonate with the challenges faced by the siblings. This shared experience of adversity could potentially lead to a deeper connection between them in future chapters.

The dialogue in this chapter is engaging and effectively conveys the emotions and relationships between the characters. (Y/n)'s candid and spirited nature shines through in her interactions with both Todoroki and Akahiro, providing moments of levity amidst the heavier themes.

One area with room for further development is the exploration of Hikari's internal struggles. While his physical injuries are vividly described, delving into his emotional journey and the toll that training takes on him emotionally would add depth to his character.

Furthermore, the narrative could benefit from more vivid descriptions of the settings to enhance the reader's immersion in the world of Nazokake. This could help paint a more detailed and evocative picture of the environment in which the characters interact.

In summary, Chapter 2 successfully builds on the foundation established in the previous chapter, further developing the characters and their relationships. The introduction of Todoroki adds an intriguing dynamic to the story, and (Y/n)'s unwavering spirit continues to be a compelling focal point. With a bit more attention to Hikari's internal struggles and additional sensory details in the setting descriptions, this chapter has the potential to be even more impactful.

CHAPTER 103 | "TO BE A LEGEND"

Chapter 3 presents a poignant exploration of quirklessness and the emotional toll it takes on (Y/n). The narrative effectively portrays the discrimination she faces within her clan, highlighting the harsh reality of a society where quirks hold significant importance. The revelation of (Y/n)'s quirklessness is a powerful moment, and the emotional weight is palpable. It effectively draws the reader into her perspective, evoking empathy and understanding.

The relationship between Hikari and (Y/n) continues to be a strong focal point, showcasing a genuine and heartwarming sibling bond. Hikari's unwavering support for his sister is beautifully depicted, providing a source of comfort and strength for (Y/n) in the face of adversity.

The introduction of the pendant as a symbol of "home" is a touching addition to the narrative. It serves as a powerful visual representation of their shared history and the comfort they find in each other. This element adds depth to their relationship and provides a meaningful anchor for both characters.

The confrontation with the elders is a scene of striking emotional intensity. It lays bare the injustice (Y/n) endures and highlights Hikari's defiance in the face of their harsh judgment. This moment reverberates with significance, deepening the reader's investment in the characters' struggles. The dialogue remains a strong asset, effectively conveying emotions and character dynamics. The exchange between (Y/n) and Hikari, as well as the elders, is sharp and resonant, driving home the emotional stakes.

The dialogue is authentic and engaging and highlights the unjust treatment (Y/n) endures and showcases Hikari's protective instincts. This scene is a powerful moment in the chapter.

However, while the emotional depth and character dynamics are strengths of the chapter, there is room for further world-building. Providing additional context about the society, its history, and the significance of quirks within their community would enhance the reader's understanding and immersion in the story. This could include details about the clan's traditions, the broader societal structure, or the history of quirk-related practices.

Additionally, incorporating more sensory details would heighten the reader's sensory experience, allowing them to vividly imagine the settings and emotions.

Overall, Chapter 3 is a compelling continuation of the story, delving into the challenges faced by (Y/n) and deepening the reader's connection to the characters. The exploration of quirklessness is handled with sensitivity, and the sibling bond between Hikari and (Y/n) is heartwarming. With added attention to world-building and sensory details, this narrative has the potential to become even more immersive and impactful.

CHAPTER 104 | "WHERE THE LINE BLURRES"

Before I start this review of Chapter 4, I'd like to kindly point out a small correction. In the title of Chapter 4, the word "Blurres" might be more accurately spelled as "Blurs." Just a gentle tweak for precision! Now, let's get back into your book!

Chapter 4, "To Be a Legend," takes us on a mesmerizing journey through (Y/n)'s subconscious, skillfully blending elements of dreamscape and reality. The opening lines set a poetic tone, emphasizing the inexorable pull of destiny, a theme that resonates powerfully throughout the chapter. The evocative descriptions transport the reader, painting vivid images of the blood moon and the abyss of ruination, immersing them in (Y/n)'s experience.

The juxtaposition of (Y/n)'s vulnerability and Hikari's determination is a narrative highlight. Hikari's promise to train her into a legend is a poignant moment, injecting hope and purpose into (Y/n)'s identity crisis. This dynamic is further nuanced when juxtaposed with the oppressive elders, creating a compelling emotional conflict for (Y/n) to grapple with.

However, in this chapter, there's an opportunity to delve even deeper into the emotional turmoil that (Y/n) experiences. While the narrative successfully conveys her sense of trepidation and vulnerability, exploring her internal struggles with more introspection and introspective dialogue could add an extra layer of depth to her character.

The nightmare sequence is a masterful stroke of storytelling, expertly blending the surreal and the visceral. The imagery of the blood moon, juxtaposed with the darkness, paints a haunting tableau. The sense of dread is palpable, and the reader is swept along with (Y/n) in her desperate attempt to escape. This sequence is a testament to the author's ability to create tension and suspense.

The introduction of Matsumoto and Akahiro is a welcomed expansion of the ensemble cast. Matsumoto's calm demeanor provides a soothing contrast to the chaos, and her instant connection with (Y/n) is heartwarming. Akahiro, on the other hand, injects a touch of humor with his cockroach charade, offering levity in the midst of darkness.

The revelation of (Y/n)'s glowing eyes and the (L/n) family crest mark a significant turning point. This mystical element adds layers of intrigue, hinting at a deeper, ancestral connection to her powers. It opens up a treasure trove of questions about the (L/n) family's history and the true nature of (Y/n)'s abilities.

While the prose is vivid and engaging, there are moments where a slightly more restrained approach might serve the narrative well. In particularly intense scenes, a more measured use of language could heighten the impact of pivotal moments, allowing them to resonate more deeply with the reader.

In conclusion, Chapter 4 is an amazing chapter, seamlessly blending elements of the surreal with the emotional. The character dynamics are richly developed, and the introduction of Matsumoto and Akahiro adds depth to the ensemble. The revelation of (Y/n)'s powers and family crest promises to unravel a rich tapestry of mysteries. While the prose is undeniably evocative, there are instances where a more restrained approach might enhance the narrative's impact. Overall, Chapter 4 leaves readers eagerly anticipating the revelations and challenges that lie ahead.

GLOW | "OVERALL REVIEW"

"GLOW" is a work of fiction that transcends the boundaries of conventional fan fiction, offering a rich and immersive narrative that stands on its own merits. From the very outset, the story captures the reader's attention with its eloquent prose and imaginative world-building. The seamless interplay of supernatural elements, family dynamics, and destiny weaves a tapestry of storytelling that is as engaging as it is thought-provoking.

Central to this narrative is the protagonist, (Y/n), a character whose journey is nothing short of a revelation. Her struggle with her quirkless identity, juxtaposed with the hidden depths of her powers, creates a poignant dichotomy that resonates deeply. This duality is emblematic of the larger themes explored in the story — the interplay between vulnerability and strength, fate and choice, and the legacy we inherit versus the legacy we create.

The supporting cast is equally compelling, each character bringing their own unique perspective and contribution to (Y/n)'s odyssey. Whether it's the enigmatic Hikari, the protective Matsumoto, or the mischievous Akahiro, each character feels like a fully-realized individual, adding depth and complexity to the narrative tapestry.

One of the story's standout features is the author's command over descriptive language. The vivid imagery of the blood moon, the abyss, and the dreamscapes not only serves to transport the reader into (Y/n)'s experiences but also creates a sense of awe and wonder. It's a testament to the author's ability to paint with words, making every scene come alive in the reader's mind.

Another of the strengths of this story lies in its ability to create a sense of mystery and intrigue. The introduction of (Y/n)'s powers, the (L/n) family crest, and the overarching theme of destiny hints at a larger, more complex narrative at play. These elements serve to pull the reader deeper into the world and leave them hungry for answers.

The pacing of the story is another commendable aspect. The ebb and flow of tension and introspection is masterfully orchestrated, allowing for moments of quiet character development to coexist harmoniously with heart-pounding action sequences. This balance ensures that readers remain deeply invested in (Y/n)'s journey, their emotional connection to the narrative intensifying with every chapter.

While the narrative is undoubtedly strong, there are areas where a touch more nuance could further elevate the impact of certain moments. In particularly intense scenes, a measured use of language could heighten the emotional resonance. Additionally, delving even deeper into (Y/n)'s internal thoughts and reflections in select chapters could provide an added layer of insight into her character.

Occasionally, a slightly more measured use of language in particularly intense scenes could enhance the impact of pivotal moments. Additionally, a touch more introspection from (Y/n) in certain chapters could provide even greater depth to her character.

In conclusion, "GLOW" is an extremely written fan fiction, a tale that transcends its source material to become a work of art in its own right. The characters are vivid and relatable, their journeys of self-discovery and growth leaving an indelible mark on the reader's heart. The author's mastery of descriptive language paints a world that is both enchanting and haunting, a testament to the power of storytelling. With its tantalizing mysteries and well-crafted narrative, this story stands as a shining example of the heights that fan fiction can achieve. It's a narrative that lingers in the reader's mind long after each chapter, a testament to the enduring power of a well-told story.

REVIEWED BY @KYRPTO (FROM U.A. STORYTELLERS)

Kyrpto