@Bloodyturtle

Cover 5 out of 5

The cover for Falen Auro leaves nothing to be desired; from your name, to the title, to the awarded stickers... everything here is covered.

Although... it would be pretty cool to see a dragon there.

Grammar 10 out of 10

It's clear you & your dad put a lot of time and effort into editing this story. There weren't many mistakes and the few that I found were nitpicky at best.

Plot 5 out of 5 (for originality)

While dragons are big right now, Falen Auro doesn't feel like it exists for the sole purpose of a G.R.R. Martin fan. You've carefully constructed a world out of the void with angels, demons, infate, telepathic dragons, and guilds. Rather than end up a cliché, it all felt very original.

Plot 10 out of 10 (for flow, plot holes, ect)

Absolutely zero pot holes. I mean plot holes.

Seriously, though, great job with this one. The story did feel a little awkward at times, but... that's because Falen made me feel uncomfortable with his murderous aura and gruesome beatings.

On the murdersome end, you are a little Martin-esque.

Characters 5 out of 5

The names are original, but easy to remember. I like them. As for realism... well, that's not really applicable to our orange-eyed hero. He's got 99 problems and this isn't one.

Character Development 9 out of 10

Le gasp! Don't hate me, but I'm giving you a 9 out of 10 on character development. Reason being both the "original" mother and the "dragon" mother haven't had much screen time to play out. They feel like key components of the story so I deducted a point for each of them.

That being said, the story is still in development and I'm sure you have more in store for the mom-beings.

A total of 45 points are possible and you scored...

**drum roll, please**

44 out of 45 points! That's an A. Wow! I hope you score as well on tests!

Anywho, do I recommend this story? Yes. Yes, I do. Should you have tissues at the ready? Most definitely. Also... this story is rated Metal. If you shriek at the sight of blood, just... don't.