Do you enjoy reading straight forward/right to the point books?

Eg.

'Sally cut off her hair and sighed.'

And not:

'A bubble of air escaped the nostrils of Sally as she hesitantly brought the sharp pair of scissors up to her thin, black hair, slowly cutting off the thing she hated the most on her body.'

Or

'Alex sat down and ate the cake whilst thinking of his brother back at home.'

And not:

'Alex positioned himself on his chair and grabbed the utensil next to his palm. A kaleidoscope of memories filled the boy's mind as he took a piece out of his cake, the fork scraping the belly of the plate causing the hair on his body to stand up and his mouth to water as he engulfed the sweet taste of the goodie he and his brother both enjoyed.'

Eh? *smirks*

So one thing I recommend is something that we all do, well, should be doing if you ain't doing it.

Write a quick rough cache of your chapter and proofread it, make sure to add in some synonyms to certain words to avoid the repetition of words.

Also, add more detail to your paragraphs.

Instead of using words like:

- He said.

- She said.

- They all said.

You can use:

- came from him/her

- erupted from his/her mouth

Do you get me?

To do all of this, I advise you to continue reading books, pick some words out of it, but don't copy and phrase or sentence in anyone's book because that isn't nice.