Hi there, UniversalPeace . Your Merlot is now ready. So just sit back and enjoy!

First impression...

To start things off, I can tell your story is a romance novel just by looking at your cover. It's quite lovely, though after reading the first chapter, I'm not sure if it fits your story. Unless your characters are going to fall through a tear in the tapestry of time and into the barbarian times, maybe a cover that reflects the 21st-century would be more appropriate.

There is room for improvement in your summary. Since you've already established the two main characters, you can build on that by elaborating on the "unpredictable destiny" bit.

Overall presentation...

Sarah Mondragon, a simple girl, meets Atkinson Smith Rhodes, an ill-tempered CEO. What ensues is a love/hate story that's filled with drama... lots of drama.

I can't decide if I'm reading an actual story or the script of 'Keeping up with the Kardashians.' It's like you are afraid readers would get bored, so you're cramming your story with whatever drama you can think up. However, while you have many ideas to keep readers engaged, you have neglected some details that create confusion in your story. For example, in chapter one, when Sarah meets Atkinson for what should be the first time in his office, she immediately recognizes him as the man who molested her at a fair one week ago. So, have they met before? How? What happened? Instead of an explanation, you continued as if that event is insignificant. Keep in mind that readers don't know what happened that caused the two characters to react the way they did, so be sure to pay close attention to what you're putting out to your readers.

Just from my observation in the chapters I've read, Sarah acts like an indecisive teenager with low self-esteem, and Atkinson is a man who thinks being violent to women is a perfectly fine thing to do. The dynamic between the two feels awkward, and there's not much chemistry between them other than lots of whimpering, stuttering (on Sarah's part), yelling and shouting (on Atkinson's part). While I don't know if this setup is intentional, one thing you need to take into consideration is what kind of characters you hope to present to your readers. Maybe spend more time focusing on building your characters, from physical appearance right down to personality, and how they fit into your story.

Grammar...

There are quite a bit of grammatical errors and spelling mistakes, along with punctuation mistakes. Of course, all this can be fixed with good editing. If you haven't done it already, I suggest you take some time to read through your story and make necessary changes. If needed, maybe find an editor or download an editing app to help you.

Final thoughts...

One thing stands out while reading your story, and that's a lot of great ideas but not much organization. Your story reads like an experiment. Throw out a bunch of ideas in one chapter, see how people react to it, then throw out the next batch of ideas. Do take time and outline your story from start to finish. It'll give you a clearer picture and more insight into how you can turn your ideas into a story.

If you have any questions about your review, feel free to leave a comment below or PM me.

Good luck with your story. :)