~ MARRIAGE – TORTURE TO LOVE BY shespeaks_starflyer ~

The cover was good but it could be blended in a more beautiful way. It was just a picture of intertwined hands and nothing that gave more insight of the story. Even the fonts didn’t appeal much.

Coming to the blurb, genuinely speaking it did possess the characteristics of the blurb but lacked in portraying the actual definition of the blurb. It did give the insight of the story but that’s not how a blurb is constructed and framed. The differences of the characters don’t sum up the blurb.

It wasn’t relevant to the genre either. The genre demanded something relatable for the teen age group and not marriage and post marriage hatred and dramas.

Grammar was smooth but it needed to be revised or edited. I found some sentences, even some dialogues that were a jumble of vague wording and blurry formations. The narrative voice wasn’t gripping at all as the strong and lucid flow it should have was lacking.

It represented more of a cliché based story and even the characters lacked originality.

~ POSSIBILITIES : YOU AND I BY Helly_18 ~

Good attempt in writing the story. But I’d like to drag your attention towards the elements that needed more focus and creativity. There were many instances where originality was lacking, making it look theatrical and vague. You didn’t threw much light at the word, ‘misogamist’, even the significance of it couldn’t be felt anywhere. In your story, Sanskaar didn’t hate marriages, instead he was against the idea of falling in love. So, that didn’t make him a misogamist.

You need to work hard on grammar and get your doubts and errors rectified, through it. Plot was nothing new and creative, instead I felt you could’ve added much more to this simple plot and on the other side, could’ve detached many unnecessary things.

~ UNHEARD SYMPHONY OF LOVE BY existingtodream ~

I’d like to start how much I liked the idea of portraying the story in someone else’s POV other than the main characters. Though emotions of the main characters were missing through this but still, I couldn’t deny that the idea was good and definitely this idea isn’t something that I keep stumbling upon. Not that it is ever done, but it is rare. Most writers don’t choose to go with someone else’s POV other than the main characters because that lacks the emotions of the main characters and the same thing happened here too.

The blurb is good but it doesn’t give enough background on the main characters and the conflicts.

The way the word, ‘misogamist’ was used, sounded clunky and awkward to pronounce. It was as if the word was just pushed somewhere in the middle to complete the ‘usage of word’ criteria. But that, literally, didn't appeal much.

~ DYSPOHRIA BY _khusiyaan_ ~

The story needs good formation, narrative dialogues, and creative plot. The basics of writing needed to be learned and carved more as there was a lack of basic skilling.

Sex is not something that is appropriate for teenagers to read; hence even the genre didn’t match.

Moreover, the usage of word and catch didn’t appeal to me as a reader, because it wasn’t poignant and framed in pieces accurately. Your story revolved around dramatic and same old cliché concepts.

A well try but needs to improve.

~ WITHERED ROSE BY polymath_land ~

A new and refreshing concept, especially how the end molded up.

Well, the blurb which you have put on isn’t considered to be a blurb but a prologue. And there is a difference between a blurb and prologue. Still, I’ve given the marks because it was capable of giving a little insight. As this was the first round, I’ve been a bit lenient with everyone but the next time, this won’t work.

It wasn’t relevant to the genre either as the age group wasn’t matched much, but as it was readable to the teenage group, I’ve again pointed out some marks.

The other important thing I’d like to point out is punctuations.

Your grammar was smooth but you need to revise more grammar rules. 

The main one is punctuation. When you end a dialogue in question or full stop, the comma won’t appear.

For example, “That’s fine.”, I smiled a little.

The above sentence is incorrect. Instead it should be,

“That’s fine,” I smiled.

There were few more grammatical errors and hence suggesting to brush up the grammar rules.

Overall, it was a good read.

~ CHAINED, BY TRADITIONS BY Its-priyaanka ~

You were damn amazing in portraying descriptions and emotions of the characters. Something else I liked was that you kept the plot short and then descriptions more. Otherwise, there were many who chose a big plot but failed to make it realistic and relatable.

Again the paragraph which you put as a blurb, can’t be called as a blurb but a prologue. Blurb is something short and something which should give you the insight of a whole story instead of someone’s POV or dialogues.

I loved the story, no doubt, but then again I didn’t like the ending. Always remember, when you write for a contest, the final message your story delivers should always be positive. Just because you don’t get your love and so, you go for a suicide mission isn’t something you should tell to your any readers, leave about young adults. Suicide, depression, self-harm are very serious topic and definitely couldn’t be left hanging like the way it was ended in your story.

But apart from that, it was a good read.

~ PISTANTHROPHOBIA BY RehanaSiraj ~

Honestly, the title didn’t work for me. It is fitting, rather typical YA, but not gripping enough.

The grammar was smooth but there were few visible errors that needed to be rectified. Usage of catch, the word and the plot was good but nothing creative. Mostly everyone has written the same story that due to their parents they became a misogamist and honestly, the judges always looks for something new and creative. Like, thinking out of the box.

Blurb was good but it could've been more intriguing and spicy.

The story was good but I felt it could’ve been better if the narrative voice was paid a little more attention. I strongly felt that the strong aura and the rhythm it should have was missing.

There is always a good factor in a story, and for yours it was emotions. I liked how the female character couldn't bring herself to come out from her big bubble of insecurity. Her emotions were strongly felt. In short, it was relatable.

Overall, a good one!

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