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Contract/Arranged/Marriage of Convenience Romance Winners

Down below we have the winners for Contract, Arranged and Marriage of Convenience Romance. Congratulations to our winners!

Make sure you all PM me SapphirianJ82 to receive your winning stickers.

I have all the scores and reviews so if you did not place but would like to have your review reach out to me please and I'll send them your way. 

The first 🥇 place winner is! 

Book title: I'm Right Here

Author: lostlovefairy

Read and judged by iburnrice

➲ Title and Book Cover - (6/10)

The title is fitting for the plot. "I'm Right Here" an arranged marriage where the woman slowly makes her man open up to her. It's beautiful. Very creative and not overused. 

When it comes to the cover, I have to say it's too flashy. The background image is nice, and it shows the mood expressed throughout the story, but font and everything else did not match. Who wrote the book? I can't tell, because it's not on the cover.

➲ Blurb - (8/10)

The blurb is beautiful and neat. Has a few grammar mistakes, but not annoying. 

➲ Plot/Creativity/Originality - (17/20)

The plot is unique and well planned. It's original; nothing I've read in here before. 

The plot unfolds smoothly. An arranged marriage where the girl had already fallen for the guy but he was still being held back by his ex lover. Then the girl shows him that she's there. Ready to wait for him. Because she loves him. 

It's beautiful.

➲ Character Development - (15/20)

The characters were beautifully written as well. The main characters are relatable. For one, the girl trying to show the man that she's willing to help him forget about his heartbreaking past. And the guy being held back by his deep affection for his ex lover and all that. They also progress. There's great development. The guy forgets and learns to love the woman in front of him. 

➲ Story Flow - (8/10)

The story flows smoothly.

➲ Grammar - (5/10)

 Yes there are grammatical errors but they are not that annoying and it doesn't cause any discomfort to the reader. The writer should simply proofread her chapters before posting them.

➲ Writing Style - (6/10)

Everybody has their own unique writing style and I liked the writer's as well. Her vocabulary is in between. Basic when needed and advanced when needed.

➲ Overall Engagement and Enjoyment - (6/10)

The book is beautiful. The characters, the writing style. The blurb. It's a hard book to put down. There are a few interesting cliffhangers that keep you wanting for more. I'd say it's a very good read.

➲ Overall Score - (71/100)

➜ REVIEW :

"I'm Right Here" is a beautifully written book. Clearly, it's a first draft. But I must say, it doesn't feel like one. The writer may have made some mistakes, but the book's flow was amazing. Also the characters were beautifully portrayed. 

The book needs a new cover and some proofreading, but it was a nice read. Definitely something I'd recommend.

I'd love to read your other projects.

Keep writing!❤️

The second 🥈 place winner is!

Book title: Bound To You 

Author: _RulerOfHearts_

Read and judged by iburnrice

➲ Title and Book Cover - (7/10)

The book title is ok. It may have been overused, but as long as the plot is new, I don't really mind. 

The title also matches the plot and it sends a message.

The book cover is gorgeous. It's a perfect match. I only have a problem with the font and color used for the author's name. 

➲ Blurb - (8/10)

The blurb is detailed and neat. There are missing punctuations, but it does make it hard to read. The blurb is attention grabbing. 

➲ Plot/Creativity/Originality - (12/20)

The story's plot is unique. It unfolds slowly but beautifully. A real rollercoaster of emotions. 

➲ Character Development - (16/20)

The characters were planned. Yes I do feel the connected with them. Their emotions and sometimes actions. 

Prithvi learning to love and accept Rachana and also Rachana's personality. 

➲ Story Flow - (6/10)

The story is a bit fast paced. But not very fast. 

➲ Grammar - (6/10)

There are a few grammar mistakes here and there, but it doesn't affect the story's flow or make the reader lose interest.

➲ Writing Style - (7/10)

Her writing style is unique. Her vocabulary is a mix of both. Basic and advanced.

➲ Overall Engagement and Enjoyment - (7/10)

➲ Overall Score - (69/100)

The book is a good read. Like I said, it's a rollercoaster of emotions. At the beginning I felt anger, disappointed, and the going forward I felt excited and then back to anger...

It's just captivating. 

➜ REVIEW :

The book is a good read. I like the writer's choice of words and also her descriptions. I also enjoyed her dialogues.

The things I'd like to state is that, when writing a book, especially if it's not a text message scene or anything similar, using acronyms like 'asap' is wrong. 

I noticed this in the scene where prithvi had Rachana hostage. The father was screaming

"Leave her asap!." 

A simple, "Leave her alone!"

Or 

"Let go of my daughter!."

Would be better than putting an abbreviation there. Even though it was a very serious and suspenseful scene, I couldn't enjoy it because of the repetition of the 'asap!'.

Either way, it was a nice book. Hope to read your other projects. Keep writing!.

The third 🥉 place winner is!

Book title: His Baby Machine 

Author: ArabelaTaylor

Read and judged by iburnrice

➲ Title and Book Cover - (6/10)

The book title is original. There may be books on here with the name, but it isn't overused. The title matches the story's plot, but I feel like it's because of the name Amor gave Maya. 

When I saw the title, I immediately thought of something close to surrogacy. Or just a contract marriage where the bride is only important for sex. 

But reading a few chapters later, I found that the title is misleading. 

The cover is beautiful. I find the fact that the girl's face is hidden to be perfect for the title. "His Baby Machine" a woman of no other importance to him except birthing his children. They may fall in love, but at the time everything is heated. Great template.

However, it wasn't professionally designed. I didn't see the author's name properly. And even the title was transparent.

➲ Blurb - (5/10)

I didn't see any grammatical errors in the blurb.

A blurb is a short description of a book. Something to tell us what the book is about. 

This author however pasted the prologue of her book as her blurb. While it was very attention grabbing, it isn't an actual blurb. 

In the intro of your book, the paragraph where you said: "This story intertwines the lives of four individuals , dividing them into couples who aim for love to be their main goal." 

This could be used as a blurb or anything else.

How should I know what's going on by just reading about the man telling the woman to strip and that she was his baby machine? 

I know that other writers also put scene from their story's as part of the blurb, but it should be accompanied by an actual explanation of the book. 

Something like this ;

("You are the one who ruined my life!." Sloane cried out in anger.

"I love you, Sloane." Jacob smiled. Just as she's about to question his words, Jacob runs towards Sloane, shielding her from a bullet which hit him in the heart. 

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The one thing Sloane wants in life is Jacob Silverado's head. He's the man who ruined her entire life, and just when she thought she's had him, he confesses his love for her and saves her from an unknown killer. )

The example above is from my story Sloane, please do not copy!

➲ Plot/Creativity/Originality - (10/20)

The story's plot is jumbled. First the prologue shows us a rude and bad image of the guy who's forcing himself on the lady. Since it was a prologue, and we know what a prologue is - an introduction to a book or something that happened before in a book ...- I didn't expect to see the two people mentioned being all lovey dovey in chapter one and two. Plus, the moving of a red thread? Being transported on clouds? A thread which intertwines two lives? Felt fantastical. 

Note, there's no Fantasy tag for the story. 

Chapter one also consists of their first meeting...

But you've already introduced in the prologue that these two have been bound by marriage and she has already started her job as a baby maker. I was very much confused. 

When you read the other chapters, there are no violent scenes between the two. It's purely romance. Her father's poor heart? I didn't see anything related to that either.

I won't deny that after reading the prologue and before going to chapter one, I felt that this story would be action filled and nothing that I've read before. 

While the plot may be original, but because of the author's introduction and lack of better explanations, I got confused. The flashbacks got me more confused actually. 

➲ Character Development - (8/20)

The characters weren't bad. At least Amor wasn't the Amor in the prologue. 

But Maya was not very realistic. 

I get that it's fiction and anything can happen, but a cold hearted guy suddenly turning soft and asking a woman to be his baby maker? And a girl falling in love in one day, gets asked to be a baby machine and instead of the expected reaction, she instead initiates a make out? Like how?

Also, I never met Maya as a person. Apart from knowing her facial structures and hair color. Same goes for Amor, the only thing I know is his background and wealth.

➲ Story Flow - (4/10)

The story is fast paced. It was really rushed and not properly constructed. Too many plot holes and unnecessary twists. It was also very confusing. 

➲ Grammar - (5/10)

Missing punctuations like the quotation mark which made the character's dialogues to blend with the narrations, spelling mistakes etc. 

This was what made me also say the story's flow was poor and it made me loose some interest. 

Chapters need to be properly edited.

➲ Writing Style - (8/10)

Every writer has their own writing style, and I found hers to be unique as well. Her vocabulary was basic and I found no problem with it.

➲ Overall Engagement and Enjoyment - (5/10)

From the readers point of view, I would say this book is a good read, although confusing. It just needs a few improvements. 

➲ Overall Score - (51/100)

➜ REVIEW : 

His Baby Machine is a good book which needs proper editing and plot construction. I found the character names to be unique. 

There's one thing that I want to draw your attention to; the flashbacks. 

Some of them had no contribution to the story. Instead of putting Maya's parents discussion about her marriage as a flashback in chapter one, it could have been the entire prologue.

Then having the couple meet with the running thread was not bad. It was comical actually. But that shouldn't be in a flashback either. Make it a chapter itself. Maya's introduction at the ball could also be another chapter, there she meets Amor and finds out it's the stranger from weeks ago. 

Also, you never mentioned Maya being informed that Amor was her contract husband. I felt like that little bit should have been there.

Another thing was Amor climbing in bed between his dad and mom and seeing his aunt whom his dad was cheating with...

What do you mean exactly? It wasn't properly described to paint an image of the scene. 

First you said the husband cheated with his teacher, and then later you said aunt...I felt like the later mentioned aunt was a relative. Also back to the title, which doesn't match with the plot. How was Maya his baby machine?. I really want to know that part.

Chapter one's intro was a bang for me. The descriptions were so pretty about the ball. I actually love your writing style. But please don't rush the story. It's ok to not update frequently than updating without properly planning.

I hope to read your other works. Keep writing!❤️

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