Writer: Egwuji

Reviewer: SavySagittarius

Title: 10/10

The title suits your story well. If read further, readers can understand why you chose the title. 'The Undivulged son' totally matches with the character you want to refer to, that is what makes it different. Your choice of words in the title makes it common as well as unique in its own way.

Cover: 9.5/10

The cover is just accurate with your title as well as Ian or should I say Hailbuzar? Lol, anyway it's just so perfect. It matches with Hailbuzar's character as you did mention him having angelic white feather unlike his devil family. Also, the fonts are pretty cool too.

Sensory detail: 10/10

How do you add emotions so perfectly? Like how? I mean, I almost had tears at the part when the fake Ted was talking about having a daughter. Oh, and also the part when Hailbuzar offered the human lady water and was caught by his father. The pain, sorrow, anger, love, you described it so good. Very well done!

Blurb: 10/10

Yet again, perfect! It's exactly a kind of blurb that attracts readers or at least attracted me to hop in and start reading. You gave just the amount of information needed and kept me in suspense. Perfect!

Setting: 9.5/10

Well, the scenarios you described were pretty good and imaginable too. I especially loved the part where Hailbuzar and Albazar. The action was too hard to control. Good job!

Character development: 5/10

Now, this is a part you have to give some time and concentration to. Your characters surely were fabulous and mysterious but you lacked character description. If you go through your story, you didn't give a description of the appearance or qualities of your character. Like, when you introduced Zara in chapter 8 or 9, you didn't give any description of how she looks, you did mention she had been Hailbuzar's good friend and also the fact that she is fierce but no description on how she is looks or what she does when she is angry or any kind of qualities. I faced a little difficulty in imagining the characters, to be honest. Go through it once buddy.

Plot: 14/15

The flow of the story was good enough but at one part I got confused. Confused as in, I didn't understand what happened when I read it but the later realization hit me. It was the part after fake Ted was attacked in the club Sinners. Ian was on his way to Ted's house but you jumped from the crime scene to Ian in a cab to Ted's house. It's a bit confusing, don't you think? Maybe, you can add a flashback on how Ian ended up in a cab after rescuing Ted from Sinners. Other than that, everything was smooth and interesting. It had suspense and also made me feel to read further.

Grammar and Spelling mistakes: 10/10

PERFECT! No mistakes at all. Very well written. I didn't find any grammatical mistakes and to add to it, your vocabulary was so good. I, myself learned many new words by reading your book. Thanks to you for that though!

Overall Impression: 14/15

It's a pretty good story. I feel like I'm going to read further if I get the time that is. I would definitely recommend others to read it too. It's something unique, you just need to correct the points/mistakes I pointed out above and it will be perfect. Only the character development and the plot holes need to be checked. Overall, it was awesome.

Total: 92/100

Reviewer's Note:-

You have great potential in yourself. I can see a very successful writer in you and trust me, one day your books will be published and many will read them too. Very well done. Just keep working hard like you are now and you will be successful. Keep every small detail in mind and correct every small mistake. Give as much detail as you can when you are writing. From emotions to the appearance of the character, everything matters. Keep writing awesome stories and stay blessed. All the best!