Author: Ghosts_Forever

Reviewer: BookLoverVenue

Title: 10/10

Nothing really different in here. The author named the book poem itself indicating that it's a poetry book. Though, I am not sure why since most of your poems are mostly on love or relating to it, so it was very easy for you to find a common ground and name. But I am not saying I have any problems with it because it's simple and straight but I guess you could have given in a more poetic, metaphorical, and artistic approach.

Cover: 6/10

It's a cover that is following a very common aesthetic which we happen to see almost every day in the life. The only reason it looks pleasing the eye of the reader however I wouldn't say I am a big fan of the cover. It has the vintage look with the coffee cup suggesting a placid and cool atmosphere but I fail to understand how the mood connects to your poems which are somewhat to a level raw. Coming to its analysis, I think the placement is terribly off. The designer's main goal in making the cover was to fill all the places in the canvas and zoom in to get all the details correct. Not the correct approach to make a graphic, TBH. And obviously, the aim was to add as many details as possible in the form of letters and texts but then again, it's graphics. In graphics, you convey concepts through color, mood, and pictures.

Blurb: 4/10

You can improve your blurb a lot. All your blurb talks about is reading the book at our own risk which is there almost 3 times when the book isn't even rated mature. Also, I did not find any triggering sequence in the poems (at least not in the first 10 chapters or the last 5 chapters). You have to understand that blurb attracts readers. And so, you have to make your blurb attract the correct audience. If your book contains philosophical topics and poetry, ADD THAT IN THE BLURB. If the poetry is on life and other flowery topics, that adds. You don't want a philosophy-loving person reading your colorful poems because then the review you will get will be horrible.

Flow/Rhythm: 6/10

This is a thing that is very much off in your poems. There are barely any lines that rhyme except a few like 'Beautiful lies'. The flow is absolutely zagged and misses out on a lot of things. I have also seen concepts being repeated in your poems. I must also tell you to try to make the lines a bit bigger and not just if 3-4 words. It cuts off the rhythm and causes problems in rhyming as well. If you are using larger sentences to rhyme, it's more catching. Also, I have seen that you are increasing and decreasing the number of lines in a paragraph even when you are using refrains. I am not saying that it's wrong but it isn't right either. Also, the thing (for example in Beautiful lies itself and a few others) repeating the same line every second line is just a wastage of words. In poetry, you keep things short and clipped. For example, if you take away the 'Beautiful Lies' except the first one in the paragraph, it'll still form a very well contracted paragraph. Also, try to use the refrain properly and not miss out on important stuff. For that, you can't just miss out on one paragraph without the refrain. You will have to continue the pattern. I prefer you to learn about refrains and poetic devices properly.

Thought/Moral: 6/10

Lots of them are of love and some are kind of on philosophy though, I think you can do a lot to express your emotions and concepts better. Using a better synonym for a word, for example. You can even try to make things shorter than necessary. One thing I noticed is that your individual lines are from 3-5 words long but your story exceeds 3 pages. Um, I think you can remedy this by cutting off un-useful information and keeping things congregated. We don't want long poems, we want good content; whether told in 3 lines or 10. Doesn't matter. Also, telling things in short words gains you bonus points. Saying more usually leads you to wander off-topic which is harmful.

Creativity: 5/10

You barely use any metaphors or simile in your poem expect that I found many in 'My world'. Though I'm not very happy with what you did. I don't understand what these particular lines mean.

"In spite of time
The ashes, they fall
Like a ripple effect of
Ink on paper
It begins when am gone."

I don't exactly understand what this means or the fact that ink makes ripples on paper because they don't. You could have used stone on the lake. There were such many metaphors which was completely out of context and which I didn't understand. If you are comparing something, make sure it's comparable.

Overall Impression: 4/10

Your poems need a huge volume of improvement. I noticed the missing punctuation as well. No commas or full shop was making it very difficult for me to read or rhyme. You were also prolonging the poems beyond necessary and making them lose the essence. However, in one poem the thing you wrote wasn't enough, for example,

"I want to
sleep next to you
peacefully at night."

That was itself a whole complete line you broke up to make into a paragraph. Please be careful of how you are using poetic devices.

TOTAL: 41/70