Author: Aarya2103

Reviewer: BookLoverVenue

Cover: 6/10

To be honest, your cover has a lot of problems in it. It's white space, proximities and mainly the balance and contrast is hugely flawed. The text is misplaced and the even when the star image is perfect with the title, it still looks a bit out of place. I really think you should consider redesigning it or ask a good designer to do it.

Title: 8/10

The title is a direct reference to the protagonist Jessie herself. Nice but I still don't know WHY the book is named so. Since it has been just 10 chapters which doesn't give much of a insight on what is going on and how exactly Allodynia's gonna help her. It's still a bit hazy but nonetheless it's a cool title and I liked it. It's just I still haven't found the connection.

Blurb: 10/10

I think your blurb was perfect. I loved the blurb to death. It was short and DEFINATELY grabbing a lot of attention. But in my opinion (This is just an opinion) don't give the definition of Allodynia in there. It was, I don't know why, making it a bit plain and boring. You can either include it's meaning in the blurb but creativity or simply add the definition AFTER the main blurb.

Sensory detailing: 10/10

Your sensory detailing was top notch. It was really a pleasure that I could read it. I loved every second of the feelings and emotions Jessie showed. The anger and frustration; everything. And Chase (or should I say Chasey?) was mostly emotionless throughout most of the part but either ways, I still felt the anger when he punched Mr. The-surname-jessie-can't-spell (and me too). Anyway, all these rambling meant that I loved it.

Settings: 9/10

The way you described settings were quite good and I really liked saviouring it however it think you are improve there just a tad bit. Thing is, your settings description was very good but I still couldn't really imagine the place or the sight very clearly. You mostly described your setting in one paragraph, make it a two paragraphs thing. That should do it.

Character Development: 8/10

To be honest, I really don't know what to say. It was just 10 chapters and I still haven't got a much deep insight on any of the characters, not even Jessie. I just know that she is a bit ill-tempered, repulsive and also a very curious being. (A girl which sinc perfectly with me. Plus a bit of cursings). Chase is a closed of guy who doesn't like to show emotions for the fear of being esteemed low. Olivia is a lovely lady, childish at heart, funny and also caring. So this is my speculations so far but yeah, I can be announced wrong as well because then again, I've just read practically 6 or 7 scenes of the book.

Spelling and grammar: 10/10

It was all perfect. I don't know how you managed it but it was truly perfect and I was actually sated reading the grammar.

Plot: 14/15

Again comes the thing, I don't know. All I've read so far is a little about Jessie, a tinnie bit about Chase and almost next to nothing beyond that. I have known Allodynia and time travel and nothing else. I still don't know how they sinc together and work simultaniously so I am practically just not gonna give any suggestions here. But however, I do think taht the story is going to take a fairly interesting turn soon. (Sorry but I have just read till Chapter nine).

Overall Impression: 13/15

I was really happy reading the book. It was perfect on its own way. I loved every second of reading it. However I think your chapters are too short. Probably 1500 words. I suggest to make it 2000-3000 words long. Thing is, they were kidnapped in chapter four and then it took them 6 chapters to finally what they were kidnapped for. To be honest, it is a bit off and I particularly didn't like that. I felt as if you were prolonging it beyond necessary. Breaking the same chapter into multiples. I prefer you don't do this. If you break this into six chapters and make the other scenes cover just 3-4 chapter (which is quite a lot too), the story will lose it's essence and will be really really distracting to the readers.

Honestly, this is the only thing I thought was flawed in the story. Other than that, it was amazing!!

Marks achieved: 88