Author: Pagal_number_1

Reviewer:  SavySagittarius

Title: 10/10

The title is beautiful! It matches your genre as well as your plot. It did have glimpses of the book in it. 

Cover: 4/10

Honestly, the cover looks more like a fan edit than a book cover. With the cutout and merging it as collage. You can do better, way better indeed. I would suggest you either remake another or ask any graphic designer to make one for you.

Sensory detail: 3.5/10

Your story is all in dialogues, a lot like a script. Even then the sensory detailing can be given, but I am sorry to say, it does not. Very little and a few places like "she blushed and slept" type of sentences. You have to improve a lot. You either turn it into a scripted form or a narrative form.

Blurb: 6.5/10

Even the blurb, it's just a mere character introduction of subhadra. There is no glimpse of story or a sneak peek into the story. Honestly, that is not how blurb should be. You have improve so much. But don't worry, you become great only by learning. 

Settings: 4/10

Not good, no settings at all. Not even a signal scenario had a good setting. Disappointed.

Character description: 2/10

In your dialogues, you only mentioned where the characters are from in a way of introducing themselves, other than that. Nothing. I am sorry but I can't give you marks here.

Plot: 10/15

The plot was understandable but the flow was very rough. It wasn't as smooth as it should be considering its a historical fiction. 

Grammar: 9/15

A lot of mistakes, in sentence formation, tenses, articles, prepositions, conjugations, punctuations. You definitely have to go back and give it a read so that you can correct it or you have to improve grammar. As piercing as it might sound, trust me, it will feel like heaven after you make it perfect.

Overall Impression: 13/15

I am honestly disappointed, but it's fine. Everyone has a starting, no one is perfect at once. You can improve and you will improve, I know it. Just go throw everything I pointed out. You can text me for helping you too, I will help you out in every way possible. Once you edit it, I can promise to be your reader too. All the best, you have the potential to do great. Keep writing and working hard. Read books and learn. It will help. I hope you are not offended by my review. I apologize if I sounded rude anywhere. Take care.

TOTAL: 62/100

GRADE: D-