Writer: Jade_S4M

Reviewer: BookLoverVenue

Title-6/10

When I first saw the title I thought it was a coincidence that your book was named exactly like the famous song by Anna Marie and James Arthur but when I saw the quote on the front of the book, I realized you named it knowingly. To be honest, I am against using famous books and songs as the name of your book because that kind of lead tojuto judgments or the book is even read. Also, I do know that you named the book after the song because the song suits the mood of the book but still, I prohibit such an act. It makes the book very clear and sometimes predictable.

Cover-6/10

It's a good thing that we don't see a lovey-dovey couple like most Wattpad books. But still, your cover does not match the mood of your blurb. Your blurb has a tragic tone to it and your cover is centered in the k-pop theme. I understand that both the protagonists are idols but I do think that they are not labeled by their profession but by individuality. Plus, there's just a guy on the cover... Being a feminist, I am quite offended.

Blurb-9/10

I have no complaints in this section. Your blurb was small and attention-grabbing. Very alluring. But I don't see how singing is a 'Duty'. You should change that word with 'Post' or 'Position', I guess.

Sensory details-7/10

In this book, the setting seemed like it never existed in the first place. Sadly, I couldn't imagine a single place they were in; not even the opening scene of the book. You didn't describe the looks and volume of any of the places they were in. Not even the vibe the places gave. Usually,y the vibe would also be evident which would be explained through the characters but in reality,y I could not find even that.

I suppose the detached feel was also due to the introduction of so many characters at once without a proper introduction. It was confusing and readers like me (who are not used to Korean names and traditions) won't be able to doa differenciate.

Setting- 6/10

To be honest even when you were explaining the things and feelings, I felt like something was missing. I was enjoying your book but I could not experience or feel the lively nature here. You were explaining some senses like visual, but you weren't explaining the taste and smell quite often. Maybe you should pay attention to all the senses equally for readers to live in that moment your protagonist is living. Also, I think you could intensify the situation. A few felt light even when they were not supposed to be so.

I suppose the detached feel was also due to the introduction of so many characters at once without a proper introduction. It was confusing and readers like me (who are not use to Korean names and traditions) won't be able to do differentiate well.

Character Development-7/10

As I said earlier, many characters were introduced at once in the first chapter itself without a proper introduction. You explained a lot about the band but you didn't mention anything at all about the individual characters. From the way they looked; hair color, eye color,r, and extra feature,s and their personalities altogether. It was very difficult for me to imagine and keep track of the book. Not to mention the names were troubling me too. Also, I believe you can do a better job in character development.

If I give you my subjective review (Just my own opinion which you are very welcome to skip as well), Somin was not exactly the kind of character I liked. You gave your best efforts to make her sassy, I understand but all I could feel with her character was coldness and a weird stiffness. She was not very nice, to be honest and she cheated on her ex. I really dunno how to say this but I dislike cheaters to the extreme detail. It's subjective, of course, because you might not have a problem with it here but I do. That is one major reason here. Also, her sassiness brought forward a rude demeanor as well, which was not appealing to me. If I talk about Sehun, he seemed a bit weird as well. He called the girl 'Poor' then asked her out... Um, I know that you were trying to make Somin look sassier but it gave completely the opposite effect.

In character development always remember that the character has a MOTIVE. A motive that describes the character. Somin's motive (becoming an idol) could have been made more prominent, but I failed to point any motive of Sehun. In some places of your book he was not adding much at all. I really failed to point out any motive of Sehun, he looked bland in some places.

Plot-13/15

I have no idea what is going to happen. Why do they have to give away their relationship to become idols? Because in the country, I live in, singers date each other without a problem. I seriously don't understand this but it might have something interesting to make them divert their paths. The drama hasn't set in quite nicely until this point to of course I wouldn't know. Also, I guess you can add a bit of subplot in there as well since you have so many characters to tackle and it might become overwhelming at one point. Also, a character there without a nice motive will look bland.

Grammar-10/10

I didn't find any mistakes. You must have proofread it multiple times so yeah, it's good to go.

Overall Impression -12/15

It's a good book but in need of a lot of effort. I think you can do a better job at character development and setting to make your book reach heights. Also, the quotes you wrote at the start of the book is quite nice but it's common as well. Almost all Wattpad books have it. At first, it was an innovative idea but now the thing is old and beaten up and doesn't invoke any feelings anymore. What you CAN do is to try and make the lines personal to the characters. Write about their fears and wants and problems. Don't make it general and keep it personal.

Total marks achieved: 76