Writer: BrokenAngel53

Reviewer: SavySagittarius

Title: 9/10

The title is good but I have seen it in several books so it's quite common but your story is different so it might work out well.

Cover: 9/10

The cover is also good but very common. It's very simple, though it looks okay. I am not sure how much the cover will attract readers, but I wasn't really attracted. Maybe adding filters and changing the font of the text can make a lot of difference. Or maybe try hiring a graphic designer.

Sensory Details: 6/10

Good! It was good, the descriptions were nice too but in a few places, I felt it too much as in, you described it in a way that doesn't sound realistic. The excitement of Leah at places was so much that it didn't sound too relatable. Or the time when Evie bumped into Ethan her emotions were overflowing. Also, the part where Mike was flirting with Evie in front of Ethan, was too much. I mean, they were meeting for a business meeting, does any official member flirt during a business meeting? It is too unprofessional. You could maybe shift the flirting from a business meeting to a success party of their contract? Also, at the end of the business meeting when Ethan and Evie were alone in the hall and he said "Don't disappoint me, princess" which was very unprofessional. I know you love bad boys a lot, I read your bio and that's fine. I even understand that it's just a story and it's fiction, but just think, when someone reads a book or watches a movie and if there is a part that is too fictional to be true, we stop reading or watching. Even though it's fictional, try keeping something where the readers can relate it with their life, it makes them excited to read more because they find it amusing.  I mean, just think it through, does anyone do that? If you would keep it as they shook hands and then he said, "Don't disappoint me, Ms. Evie" then also it would be understandable but that was not up to the mark. I apologize if I sound rude, but I am being honest here and just trying to make your book better and best. 

Blurb: 10/10

Awesome! I personally really liked your blurb, it has the perfect proportion of description and glances into the story. You just gave out the required points and kept the other details for readers to find out. Good job!

Setting: 10/10

Again, Amazing. The way you described the setting of the locations was so beautiful. Especially the hotel where Evie and Ethan met was so fascinating that I almost thought I am Evie meeting Ethan. Really good job in here!

Character Development: 8/10

Here you gave good character detail to Ethan but not to Evie or Leah. I know you added a picture to refer to how they look but I think even though you add a picture, detailing is necessary. So I suggest adding up few points when introducing a new character. At least 3-6 points on their personality and looks.

Plot: 9/10

The storyline was good. The flow was good and I was myself engrossed at some parts of the story! The bestie moments in your book was really cute. I was literally smiling like an idiot while reading it.

Grammar: 8.5/10

The vocabulary was good, the spellings were also fine, the grammar overall was okay. Only tenses are making me cut marks. A lot of tense mistakes as in shift of tense from past to present or vice versa. Try keeping a constant tense all over the book. That's all.

Overall: 12/15

Overall, it was a very nice story and I do recommend everyone to try it. I hope the review helped. Just take care of the points I marked. All the best, Keep writing! 

Total: 81.5/100