Author: Cakeo-San

Reviewer: SavySagittarius

Title

I loved the title! It itself is enough to excite a reader and also suits the story well. Great job!

Cover

The cover was nice but not good enough to attract readers at first glance. It just a combination of two pictures. It doesn't relate to the book other than the characters and the moon. Your cover can be better. 

Sensory Details

Perfect, the sensory details were perfect. Every single emotion was described so well and it was so relatable. Very good job!

Blurb

Well, your description was okay but too short. A good blurb has a glimpse into the story and character's life/personality but that lacked in your blurb. So, I suggest you to re write it.

Settings

Your description of places and locations were good and clear, they were relatable too. I could imagine the locations also. So your settings were good enough to intrigue readers.

Character development

Your characters need development. You lack description and also the process of development or change in a character. From good to evil or vice versa. A description of their looks or outfit is also needed. I won't say you didn't give any description, but you need to add on more.

Plot

The starting... WOW! just awesome! I loved the way your started off and carried the plot with perfect flow and twists. It was very intriguing and addictive. Keep writing the same way.

Grammar

Your only problem I noticed was the shift in tenses frequently. In many places, it jumped from past to present and back to past. I suggest you maintain a constant tense. If past the only past and if present then only present. Other than that, everything was okay.

Overall

Overall I loved the story and it was very interesting. Just keep in mind the above points and make necessary changes and it will be perfect. Keep writing amazing stories.

Grade: B+