Writter:PunHunter
Reviewer: BookLoverVenue

Title-9/10

There was really nothing to wonder about, it is a straight hit. Why is Kenna kept alive? Because of the Entwinment. Why is Jed keeping her safe? Because of the Entwinment. And to be honest, people might have named it as 'Mates', and you didn't, for that, I am quite pleased. Diverting from the regular happenings always serves right. BUT (sorry, there is always a but) when I read the title, I thought about Enwitnwed (a book on fairytale). So I would suggest you to reconsider the title but even if you don't, it's quite good away ways. Well, the choice is yours.

Cover-6/10

A LOT can be improved in the cover. As I see it, the picture is giving that mystery vibe but still somewhere there, its lacking a hell lot. The title, too, is misplaced along with the cut out subtitle or no author name. That plus the misbalanced contrast is really irking me. Also, I didn't like the red colour of the text.

Blurb-9/10

It was written very nicely. It was small, held the perfect things in them but still it was lacking something in there. When I read the blurb before reading the book, it didn't really give me any insight as to what the book might say or show. But after reading the 6th chapter, when I read the blurb, it made perfect sense. I dunno why it happened or is it because of my own problem but I think, you can improve the blurb just a bit. Otherwise, it was good.

Sensory details-10/10

Okay, you won this round, the sensory detailing WAS PERFECT. I loved it. And to be honest, I wanted to read more (which I will but later). No other book I have reviewed made me think 'When is the author gonna update?'. I loved every minute of the sensory detailing. It was so nicely written. I could almost live in the moment they were in. Their every feelings and notions were perfect.

Setting- 8/10

THIS is the place were you have to pay attention. Just a bit. You did explain the setting bit but they were not clear enough to paint a picture on my mind. Take for example the ball, the royals were having. You explained the glittering atmosphere and lavish styles and even the smell and tasty looking food. But you didn't quite explain what the ball LOOKED like. As is, how big the perimeter was of the ball. Or the setting up of the tables and the other so ons.

Character Development-8/10

I will start speaking about this point with one very important sentence, "Give your character a MOTIVE." A CHARACTER ALWAYS NEEDS A MOTIVE. If they don't, they are practically dead and no one will like them. Your female protagonist, Kenna had a motive. A very distinct motive that she wanted to avenge her sister by killing her murderer. Which made your female character VERY VERY strong and noteworthy. She had a motive which was worth it. However, when I looked at Jed, I was a little lost. He didn't have a motive (He actually did but you weren't pushing it to make it stronger) therefore his character was somewhat not matching up-to the standard you portrait Kenna. To rectify this mistake, you have make him LONG to get or do something. In this case, it's significantly wanting to get rid of Kenna. The aura was there but it wasn't strong.  Not that, you HAVE to make it his motive. Just give him a motive. You want both your characters to be equally strong and equally appealing.

Plot-13/15

Three words: I loved it. But there were a few problems too. Your story tells the take of a place where Fae, supers, vampires, hexbloods and witches. Your fantasy world was so good but I think, you lacked to execute it. It felt like a half-hearted attempt to describe. In the first chapter, where you explained the positions of each species, you should have explained the world as well. Is this only prevalent in a particular place or a whole world. Like how did this come to being. See, while writing fantasy, you have to ask yourself questions. A lot of questions. If the hybrids are enslaved, they why? You have to create a whole new world in your head and explain it in the book for readers to feel it. If you want clarifications, try reading Hunger Games (if you haven't already), remember how Katniss explained, the thirteen districts and of course the Capitol. Also WHY was the Hunger Games held and what did they gain. EVERYTHING was there with absolutely no plot holes. Therefore ask yourself question as to how a particular thing is happening if it's happening.

Grammar-10/10

It was perfect and I felt quite nice about it. Stories with perfect grammer is my weakness.

Overall Impression -13/15

I loved your book, I really did. It has such a great potential, and someday, I would really like it being published as e-book or paperback. But before you do so, play attension to your setting just a bit a great deal of things are to be done in the setting up of the fantasy world. I suppose, you find someone to help you with it. It's kinda hard doing it yourself. The person you choose, tell her/him to read the book and converse with you as to what is the fantasy world missing. Then tell your reader the world you imagines while writing the book and I am sure your reader will be able to help you out of this minor plot hole. Other than that, the book is amazing. The pace was perfect as well just that I think the pace got a little slow at the end. The chapters were getting shorter. To be honest, from chapter seven to chapter Ten, the scenes were quite the same and can be squeased in one or two chaps. Don't continue to prolong a chapter which does not need any prolonging. Try to keep them smooth and clean

Total marks achieved: 86