Author:walushaf

Reviewer: Victory_in_Winters13

Title: (10/10)

I loved the title of the book which simply delivers a message of caution, unlike fanciful titles I have seen. You gave a direct caution which was quite inquisitive for me to know more.

Cover: (8/10)

I liked your cover but it did not spell thriller as much as I hoped for. I liked the blood splattering on white which made it interesting enough to know more and also I liked the key concept. I think adding a bit more dark image could make your book cover look better.

Sensory details: (10/10)

Commendable job covering all the emotions and the five senses in the story. I liked how you made the characters' steely exterior and their mindset you created which created a mysterious atmosphere, which is precisely what was liked in your type of genre.

Blurb: (10/10)

Your blurb was concise and pretty interesting to read because you clearly proved that murder can provide extreme caution with the death of Caitlyn for the five teenagers who were once upon a time close to her but they drifted apart owing to specific reasons. You gave a power-punched start to your blurb and finished it with the mysterious lines which were highly accurate in my opinion. 

Setting: 10/10

The setting was pretty concise and clear and also aptly presented in your story and what impressed me was that you managed to portray the whole scenario through the characters which I feel was adequate enough for the type of genre you have chosen.

Character Development: 10/10 

To be honest, I am actually speechless because you did absolute justice to all your characters, noting from their mega triumphs and flaw to the minute detail. I am actually impressed with your way of portraying Diego and Matt, both having their own enigmatic personalities Hunter's personality like "I don't care but we will see" attitude, Alison and Emilie, being sporty and fashionable. Quite an unusual way of bringing in all these different personalities together to solve a mystery which seems to be a tough case and also a great job in exploring their type of personalities which is something not many people would really do it as well.

Plot: (13/15) 

Looking at the plot, I must say that I enjoyed your book to the utmost detail from the murder, to consistently move towards the thriller part. I loved how you projected terror in your characters with random dates and pictures in blood and the way the plot moved on, it was simply beautiful. Not only that you also managed to bring in truly original ideas for a new terror of the story through Descartes' mansion. I was absolutely amazed by the type of thinking you went to show a strand of DNA through Diego and later bringing in all characters in the midst of October to collectively stand together. People usually use supernatural things that you haven't is also a plus point here. When it comes to their way of expressing themselves I thought to tell you that when you are using another language in the story, do make sure to add the translations in them as well because not many people might get what are the characters saying. It can be pretty tedious there but doing that would help the reader understand that what possibly next can happen.

Grammar and Spelling mistakes: 6/10

Despite having a cool plot, I felt that you might need to explain your story in the past tense rather than present tense. It can be difficult when you are explaining the past of a particular character to someone. I do not know how many people do appreciate mysteries, thrillers, and such types of genres in the present tense, but it can be very confusing when you rewind towards the flashbacks. That was a major drawback I found here because I felt that you could not exactly explore Hunter's character with the past he had with Caitlyn and how was Diego's situation of being paranoid. Also,I felt that more ornamental language can be used here. However, I appreciated that you managed to nearly maintain your story in a single tense which is a rare feat.

Overall Impression: 14/15

Being a fan of mystery, thriller genres, I was absolutely amazed by the level of originality you managed to bring in your story also with the amount of vulnerability you showed in the characters, and finally the plot. All you need to do is maybe bring in past tenses in the story so that it clearly settles with the people of how concise is the plot of the story and also bringing in a better enigmatic atmosphere. That would be the only improvement required in your story. Also, I was amazed by your aesthetics which were done great and good luck!!!! 

TOTAL: 91/100

GRADE: A-