Title: Stupefy
Name of the author: A_Whalie
Number of chapters read: 1- since it was a short story 1 chapter long
Reviewer: MarvelDreamer

Grammar:
pretty good, no glaring issues, made the story easy and fun to read.

Dialogue:
Well-written. In most places it was clear who was talking, felt like someone was actually speaking.

Descriptions:
Painted an image, although there were a few over used words (such as blushing). Try to find other ways to convey those words, either look up synonyms or change it into a chain of several different actions (for blushing, you could use a shy smile, not looking up, a red tint to their cheeks).

True to Character? :
This is a fanfiction, so although you have some leeway on the character's actions you still need their fundamental traits. I think you did a good job on this, having them do what you want while still having them be their characters.

Other Notes:
your drawings at the end were cute, and I look forward to seeing more writing from you again!

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