BOOKTITLE : Valkyire (Life Of A Warrior)

REVIEWER: -evphoric

AUTHOR : MarvelDan6 / Marvel

GENRE: Fantasy

COVER : 9/10

I like the cover and I think it is very effective at attracting the readers with its simple yet mysterious theme. I love the color scheme you chose for this cover, as it matches well with your plot.
However, I think that you could have a better font choice for the title.

TITLE : 7.5/10

I like the title. It's a great choice of a title for a fantasy-themed book.
However, I think that your choice of a title has been commonly used by many more authors for fantasy related books too. Other than that, I also think that you don't need to put the words (Life of a Warrior) beside the word Valkyrie, as it makes your title look too wordy.

STORY DESCRIPTION : 7/10

I feel like the description is too bland. Yes, it does tell readers what the story will be about, but other than that it doesn't showcase any kind of emotion or action.
There are also some minor grammar mistakes in it such as the sentence in paragraph two, where you should have put the letter a before the sentence strange purple-eyed women.

PAGE LAYOUT : 7.5/10

Other than the prologue, I think all the chapters have a fair length, and it's neat. For your prologue, maybe try not to use the middle justify, since it makes it looks less neat.
Also in chapter 15, please don't italic random text.

CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT : 6/10

I felt as if JJ is going to cross the border of being that cliché girl in other books. Please watch out for her personality, or she'll just be your regular cliché female protagonists.
Other than that, I also haven't seen any development in your characters, so you might want to fix that.

GRAMMAR/VOCABULARY/SPELLINGS : 3/10

The first blatant, basic mishaps that I frequently see in your story is the misuse of past and present tenses. It also seems like you can't control the emotions of your characters correctly, and that makes your sentences very confusing.
You also like to forget to add a comma in between words, so you might want to look more into that.

Your vocabulary also seems very chaotic. For example, in the first half of a chapter, your vocabulary is nicely spread, then in the other half, you started using teenage slang? I am kind of confused with it, to be honest.
There are also some spelling mistakes located in your story, so you also might want to proofread it more carefully next time.

COMMUNICATION WITH READERS : 5/5

I'm surprised to see such a close connection between you and your readers. You communicated with them and laugh with them. I believe this deserves a full score!

GENERAL SATISFACTION: 9/15

There are still so many areas that are lacking in your book. So, as a result, I can't be as satisfied when reading it.
I recommend maybe try to talk to an editor so that you can at least edit your grammar and spelling mistakes.

Your plot pacing was also too fast for my liking, it's as if I'm running a race just to catch up with the plot. I recommend to tone it down a little, and not just to sprout out scenes from left and right.

With a little bit more of emotion and action in your story, I'm sure it will be very amazing to read about. I'm looking forward to those improvements!

TOTAL: 54/80

THANK YOU FOR SUBMITTING YOUR WORK FOR REVIEW. WE WISH YOUR WORK MORE SUCCESS. -TSC.