By 9ice_for_what :

Okay so right off the get-go it was pretty interesting, the first chapters did suck me out of it pretty quickly as I would've preferred to get a rich description of the looks but that's okay!
I'll say good things first; The punctuation and Grammer were pretty good! With only slight mistakes here and there like missing a speech mark, the adjectives were simple and easy to read and it was really interesting to read Vida's thoughts as I really felt her voice (I honestly imagined her with purple hair like Vidia from "Tinkerbell")
Hearing from Katie (bite me) was really intriguing and I liked his interactions, it was really confusing at first but with a bit of explanation, it was understandable and lastly I really enjoyed the way you portrayed the friendship in the first few chapters.

However, there were things that REALLY sucked me out of the story;
Sadly as much as I love some of the characters I honestly felt confused with who was talking and who they were, most of the personalities felt the same which isn't terrible but it was easy to mix up the characters, the most memorable was Vida, Katie and Shawn, Eddie a tiny bit because he reminded me of Shawn a little.
Next is the grandma.

God this REALLY hit me and don't get me wrong it wasn't entirely your fault it was partly mine because I've been around my Gran and my great gran since I was 3 and I honestly don't ever hear them say the sort of things Katie's gran did, it was cringey and very...off-putting. I tried to keep reading it but it just kept making me want to stop,
And finally the overuse of characters, honestly it was hard to enjoy it with so many characters and just wasn't my cup of tea but for those people who like many characters and interesting plot, I recommend it! I'm sorry if this is harsh this is just my review and honest criticism I feel awful though...
And for my final sadly bad point...

I honestly skipped most parts with all the others and just went to the bit between Vida and Katie because they were the interesting ones to me and it was mainly about them.
I'm so sorry for being harsh :( I really did try to enjoy it but it just wasn't for me...
Maybe I'll return to it eventually and write another review about it with hopefully more positive points.

And for the results...

Punctuation & Grammer: 6.5
Adjectives, synonyms, etc: 3.2
Reading level: 5.0
Length: 5.5
Reasons:
The punctuation and Grammer could use some work but it wasn't terrible and I've seen worse.
The adjectives, synonyms etc weren't as good, very simple and not described as well as it could've been but does have the potential to better itself.
Reading level was pretty in the middle, it was simple and easy for people with dyslexia and reading challenges, not something I'd personally pick, but suitable for all audiences.
The length was okay, a bit inconsistent but other than that was easy flowing and reasonable!

Overall: 5.9

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