❥​ Author: Silent_Learner

❥​Reviewer: hfalcon24482375

❥​Chapters: 10

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❥​First Impression:

⇢​BLURB-

Your blurb is pretty gorgeous! I love the formatting in which you introduce
the characters! You also have a paragraph about the plot. You leave it on a
'cliffhanger' so we know what's going to happen without actually knowing what will
happen.

⇢​CHAPTERS-

Your chapters seem to be extremely organized! I love the Chater_X
format, it's unique but also very efficient! One thing that's definitely out of order is
COPYRIGHT! That should be the first thing there. Author's Notes/Important Notes
can be displayed without depending on how it affects the story, but if you have
general authors notes, they can go in the beginning as well.

❥​Cover/Graphics:

⇢​COLOUR SCHEME

-While the colour scheme is not always considered anything beautiful or attractive, it relates to the theme. Pained and dull. Not having bright colours was a smart choice!

⇢​RELATION TO TITLE-

At first I was a bit skeptical until I really took a look. In the girls eyes, she seems to be pained, hurt, and so full of emotions that she'll explode. It relates to the title because she looks like she's holding in the pain.

⇢​OVERALL-

The first thing I noticed is that it seems to be vertically stretched. This can of course be just my screen or possibly even the design, but it makes a wonderful piece of work look like the author doesn't care about the cover.

❥​Title:

⇢​TITLE-

Your title is stunning! It made me super excited to click the read button! It
tells you that there might be pain, suffering, and trauma, but it's also a title that tells
you that there will be an excellent story within.

❥​Plot:

⇢​PLOT HOLES-

There were no plot holes whatsoever! You explained everything
gorgeously. Even if a piece of information was missing, you can clearly tell it's part
of the story and that it will be revealed later on.

⇢​PACE-

The pace is arguably the most important part. It's essential that happenings happen at the right time. Even if the plot itself isn't very original, you can spin it around by exaggerations in pace.

You start off the story with a slow burn. We're dropped in the middle of a mess that
is soon to be solved.

⇢​HAPPENINGS-

By happenings I mean the occurrences, or scenarios you add in.

I loved every single one! Of course there were some bland moments, but you pump
them up with salty relations, sweet nothings and spicy attitudes!

You keep a nice balance between the core emotions in the story, anger, heartbreak,love, and trust. There are scenes that strongly put forth the message of one, and it dies down a bit in the next.

❥​Characters:

⇢​DEVELOPMENT-

Character development and their reactions to what happens to
them is what makes a book interesting. If they react the same way as any old
character, what's the point of reading right?

You mature and age your characters wondrously. You can see where they started,why they started there, and what made them how they were. A clear picture is painted for us.

Along the way, slight and subtle changes are made to the characters that almost
entirely opens up a new world for them. You force their eyes open to new possibilities.

Slowly but surely the characters beginning to consider them. You can see how their
world changes. You can see how they react. You can understand why they react the
way they do.

By the end (of what I've read), you can tell that they went from the prototype, to
revising, to a fabulous final product.

⇢​ROLES-

Each character in your book plays a role that is not only fitting to their
character, but fitting in today's world. I can see the similarities between your
characters and the twisted situations our society forces them into to make them
who they are. They go together like cake and frosting!

❥​Writing Style:.

⇢ CONSISTENCY:

I do believe that you are very consistent with your writing style!
I know that sometimes I suggest changing things up a bit, but here's what I mean by
consistency.

I mean that your style doesn't drastically change. You don't suddenly become
poetic or happy go lucky. Adding in prose or taking away some details is always
okay so long as it isn't like a bomb!

⇢​FITTINGNESS TO THE STORY-

Every story is unique, and so is everybody's writing style. Sometimes the author's writing style doesn't match the story and that's okay.

Yours fits the story overall, it's a decent fit and it totally works! If you added more
setting explanation and details, I think it would be a perfect match!

❥​Language:

⇢​GRAMMAR/SENTENCE STRUCTURE-

You build your sentences in a very unique way.It's grammatically correct, don't worry, but in certain contexts it can be a little odd.
You word your sentences in a way that it gets the point directly across. In softer
tenderer moments you could add a few more flowery words to make everything
seem more light-hearted.

⇢​PUNCTUATION-

I noticed that you use '!!?' quite a bit. While this is normally not a
problem in texting or chatting, it's pretty unprofessional to see more than one
punctuation mark unless it's an ellipses.

⇢​SPACING-You'r spacing is a bit all over the place! I can't find a definite pattern in
it. Sometimes there's proper spacing, [a paragraph or dialogue, a blank space, then
another paragraph or dialogue] and others it's just one after the other. You can
choose to have space between each paragraph or not, but keep it consistent withwhat you choose.

⇢​DETAILS-

The details you include are all necessary, which is really good! Being
bogged down by useless facts can often bore the reader, something you don't do!
While the actual story itself is written wonderfully, you should consider adding in atad more prose. It would really help carry the story along and add some extra emotion to everything!

⇢​TYPOS-

There are no typos at all! It's clear you made sure to eliminate them!

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