Author : FelicityIsAwkward

Reviewer : EATABLES

Chapters Reviewed: 5

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Book Cover:

The cover is interesting though which gives or picturises the readers with the typical meaning of the title. Pleasant much!

The Title:

Title is catchy and instills curiosity on the minds of readers at a glance, but I feel its too long...Like 'Up in the clouds' is fine but whatever was written after that, honestly is tiring..no one will have much of the patience to actually read each word of the title...So its something catchy, interesting and a little short- like that they prefer.

Plot:

The plot definitely has a great potential and strong base to move forward to heights. So I honestly feel you haven't done justice to the book by making it a short story.....This definitely requires a novel-type writing....Since the story was made short, you couldn't do justice to the book and plot making it too easy for the readers to guess with a lot of loop-holes, and that definitely made me loose my interest a little towards the end. It could have been made detailed with description of each scene in a proper way rather than just making it short and boring.

Grammatical errors:

Whenever a reader opts to read a book, little errors does make a huge impact on their flow and sometimes even leaves them confused. So, nothing much, just that it requires a little editing here and there. And Dear Author, kindly make sure to have a clear idea of the past and present when you type out the tenses....Honestly, that makes a huge difference.

Character Development:

Towards the begining, the character development was a little weird you know and you could have made it much better by portraying their dialogue in a better way....Towards the part where the moon angel takes her to the skies till the time the secret was revealed, the character development was just perfect...Then after that out of nowhere, I lost track of what was happening, meaning I was confused...You could definitley add a few more scenes, to help readers to connect dots.

Overall:

I love your writing style and ideas, but honestly before you start writing, you must analyse the 'plot potential', as in whether it is to made a short story, a novel etc....Kindly do that, and reconstruct your story.

I hope my suggestions will help you build your story line.

Great Day!

Anika.