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First impression:

Cover: The cover has an interesting aesthetic, but doesn't do much to grab attention. It's just plain. It can get lost among other books. I strongly recommend updating it to be more present. You can also take the help of a good cover shop for this.

Blurb: The poetic aspect of the blurb I really liked. It's awesome and enough to get my interest. Please do not make any changes!!

First chapter: First of all, Alaska is such a unique and creative name! The first chapter really started of well. I loved your opening sentence. Got me listening. But then you were a little too quick to break your suspense. Might have worked on building Alaska's guilt and showing more tension. You did a good job, working in the backstory little by little. From a reader's perspective, I would totally keep reading...

Use of language:

Grammar-wise, there are really no issues. Literally. No typos, nothing. I can really see how many times you proofread your works. Your vocab and such are good. So overall, I have no issues with this part.

One thing I really want to mention here is that sometimes, it got confusing. Who's speaking? Is it will or Nat? Always use separate paragraphs for dialogue by different people. Otherwise, it gets creamy. Particularly in 'Debate', when Will and Alaska were talking about marvel. I get that it was a heater discussion, but try to remind your readers in between so that they don't get confused. Also, work out your spacing when writing a dialogue between two people as I said.

Characterization:

See, this is where I wanna give some pointers.

1] Work in your emotions. I just felt a bit distant from Alaska's feelings. I get what's happening around her and how she should feel, but I don't actually feel it with her. Your first chapter worked in her feelings well, then they just got a bit overlooked.

2] When it comes to some things, always prefer to show and not tell. I know, this is an old one, but it works wonders. Instead of just saying 'trying to break free'. Try showing the readers something that shows the struggle. Like yanking their arms.

3]Work in little quirks that make your character real and relatable. So far, the only quirk I've seen in Alaska is that she says YAy! a lot. On that note, that loving pirated movies was a good touch. Try to show the readers more of how her past affected her like this.

4] The relationship between Will and Alaska just doesn't sit right. It feels a bit forced. I get that both of them are emotionally distant characters, but then again this issue is related to the first one. Pause on the emotions. Make the reader connect. It's important to let your reader know how she feels. But then again, concentration too much on emotions is not good. And telling her emotions directly won't work too. So, show emotions, don't tell.

The good thing is, I can really see how Alaska is sassy and doesn't let anyone else make her decisions for her. I can also see how Will and Alaska relate to each other. And Alaska and Nat! Come on, they are one hell of a duo! The connection I saw there was awesome.

Plot:

The plot is the most difficult part of the story. And yours is awesome. There are no plot holes. It moves and flows like a river. It's really good and keeps pushing me to read the next chapter. I Planned to read just five, but I ended up doing more. It is very engaging. I don't think that you need any pointers there!!

The way the story unravels makes me want to see how the next chapter goes. And then the next. And then the next.

Title:

I love how you worked in the title with a figurative meaning. It is very apt and fairly attention-drawing. but hey, you don't name the book to draw attention, you name the book to fit its contents and I think you did a very good job!

Writing Style:

You're writing style is good overall. I love how you bring in a lot of references. And the metaphors and figures of speech work well too. The songs inside the story really give closure to your chapters. They describe how Alaska feels.

One thing I want to point out is that you have to grasp all opportunities at suspense. End more on cliffhangers. You are too quick to break your suspense. You might wanna make your readers suffer a bit. For example, during the scene where Will gets Alaska a guitar? She wonders where he had disappeared to and almost immediately, he comes out with a guitar.

Your writing style is a bit fast-paced and frankly, that's what keeps the reader racing forward chapter to chapter. But as I mentioned earlier, you might want to pause on some part to let the reader know how the character is feeling.

Originality:

Your story had a fairly known dynamic of an orphan girl trying to make it in the world with a big bad villain trying to stop her. But, It's almost never about whether it is a cliche, It's about how the concept is written. The story might have been said, but not by you. In that aspect, you really showed a lot of creativity. And also, the father-daughter arch is rarely ever written about, so you get extra points for that!

Overall I would rate this story: 6/10

Overall, a really good plot, but could use a lot of improvement in the character development area. Keep going! You show a lot of promise!