Author: DocileFiasco

Reviewer: __Carrots__

Chapters Reviewed: Ten

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o FIRST IMPRESSIONS:

My take here, on first impressions cannot even amount to how much impressed I have been, but here it goes.

Blurb wise:

When a person searches for a book, whether it be in a traditional library or a virtual one, they look for an appetising, expressive, thought provoking, intense, deep and (I'm running out of words here) blurbs.

And your blurb DocileFiasco, gives us all of it.

The way you started, the way you brought us toward the middle and the way you concluded your art of a blurb, everything was sculpted in such a way that how could I not be impressed?

How could I not want to read further?

How could I not want to press that read button, and savour and dwell on everything that you wrote?

Just like I said before, words can honestly not convey how well written it is, not just your blurb but your book in itself.

How you started your blurb with the question, "If your life is a canvas, then what are the colours?"

There, right there. You had me right there. And gradually when you answered, "Emotions" with a period. That is when I realized that I was just about to read a book written by a person, abundantly gifted in the art of writing.

Cover wise:

If I had to score your cover, then I'd score it nine out of ten. Even though, I'd want to score it a full ten.

Why? Because there is always room for improvement.

Even if right now, just as it is; your cover can prove to be so artistically unquestionable. Then I wonder how mind blowing it could be if you'd go that one step further (which is totally invisible because your cover is the idealistic notion of perfection) and up your game.

Everything merges together to give us exactly what we'd expect of a brilliant author. Or a brilliant graphic artist for that matter. So kudos to that lovely person who made you this words-can't-express cover.

Title wise:

"Glitched In Colours"

After I say that, what else is left to say?

It is an original, profoundly contained with the hues of you (damn! I think reading your amazing writing has made me up my writing game a bit too) anyway. Like I was saying, if I were browsing a library, and if I were to come across a book with that title, then that book would a hundred percent be going into my cart.

The purpose of a title is to entrance your readers into the spectrum of reality that your book provides, and that's exactly what "Glitched In Colours" does.

It is a very very thoughtful, creative, well informed, insightful yet curiosity building, title.

Again, good job!

o PLOT/STORYLINE:

A teenage mobster, who's probably caught the FBI's attention, who can see people's emotions through a spectrum of colours. Whatever they feel, is whatever he sees. . . Now that's a unique storyline.

A very promising one too!

Considering this is a completed book, you have probably dealt with any plot holes that were digged in the book, because with plot holes you cannot have a conclusion.

o CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT:

Your character development skills in the first ten chapters have been totally epic.

In books there are a few characters whom you relate to and then there are others who pique your curiosity with there overwhelming existence.

Yep, that's Laurent Ferbsy; an overwhelming existence.

Every time that I think I have figured out his reasoning, his ability, his true character, you reveal something that makes me see him in a totally new light. And there I am at step one again!

You are really good at this, actually you are so very talented, I am so awestruck!

o GRAMMATICAL ERRORS/ TYPOS:

I am guessing you are not abominably bad at grammar. I think you know how it works and how it doesn't. And which principle suits the context and which doesn't.

At the same time, I think you have a very wild and prolific train of thoughts. And if you don't get them written down right then and there, you'll never be able to write the same again.

You're a very fast paced writer, and that's exactly why you have missed your grammar points here and there and also wobbled up a few words here and there.

Many of your sentences are framed thus, "If cannot eat now, then want blood."

You have eaten loads of words and verbs in your chapters.

The proper sentence should be, "If I cannot eat now, then I want blood."

(That's a weird example, don't mind me.)

So yes, while I understand that it is not possible for you to pay heed to grammar and words when you are so elevated and anxious to get your thoughts written down, a throughout proofread always works.

So when you are done writing your chapters, take a moment to reread your content and edit all the mistakes.

Your book definitely needs a heavy doze of editing. It is hard to notice missing words, especially when you know exactly what's going to come next so that's why you need to be very attentive and thorough when you reread and edit.

o WRITING STYLE:

Every writer has their own unique and customized writing style.

However, your writing style, DocileFiasco has been one of the most unique writing styles that I have read on Wattpadd.

Actually, I won't be exaggerating at all if I said that your writing style is the most unique writing style that I have read on Wattpadd.

Your flow of words, your metaphors, your dialogues, your monologues, vocabulary, everything is up to the mark. Not just that, it sets a different record on its own. One that authors have to try really hard to beat.

Honestly, I am dumbfounded how your book hasn't reached at the boom of recognition yet. I am more dumbfounded that I hadn't discovered your book before you signed up for a review.

Your book deserves a million reads!

The way you express your thoughts, the words you use, how you structure your sentences, your art of writing entirely, is just so mind blowing. Every sentence that I read, makes me admire your work in again and again and again.

I am going to say that my vocabulary doesn't equip me with enough words to express my profound appreciation and bewilderment.

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I hope you take all my highlighted suggestions and typos and grammar corrections into consideration, because if you don't, well there won't be any point to all of this, would there?

If there are any further questions and suggestions please comment.

If you think that some parts of the review didn't stand up to your expectations, and also that you found it confusing, please let me know.

Zainab.

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