Book : Run
Author : hegivesmepurpose
Reviewer : BiancaRuther

Title (3/5) :

It could have gone better than this verb. It clearly doesn't give an insight to what the story is about or what it is indicating to the story.

Cover (1/5) :

I didn't know it was Harry Styles in the picture until it was described in the cast list. Even less, the girl he's kissing isn't lucid to the reader. The cover is too blurry. In Wattpad, the beauty of the cover matters. You can always find a lot of designers though.

Blurb (9/10) :

The blurb was good. I could get an idea of what the plot might proceed to and seems promising. Your use of words were good and I think there are scarce elements you need to reconstruct to create an exemplar blurb.

Grammar and vocabulary (16/20) :

Your grammar was good as well as the vocabulary. Even after, there were a few places I'd want to point out.

One. In the disclaimer section, disclaimer 2, more specifically, you wrote ... personalities, traits, etc. are apart of creative writing rather than a part. I'm guessing this might probably be a typo but you'll have to take a brief check once your edited draft is done and ready to be published. The above words you wrote states that your work is not a pure version, this could potentially create problems for you if you're making the book more official.

Two. In the prologue, the narrator is constantly saying "Running. I was running". I'd like to point out two things in this :

The first is that the phrase doesn't seem to flow well. You could write as : I was running, never looking back and my mind focused ahead with all of what was surfing through. The simple phrase could prove more emphasized. However, this is just my suggestion. You can modify it the way you like to.

The second thing was that this phrase was frequently told and I've read novels with the repetition sequence to adorn the writing but here, it'll just blow the head of a reader to say -- Darn, I know you're running, man! , although it was the narrator reminding herself. Somewhere, the description seems too much to sound a bit weird as well.

Character development (9/10) :

The character was well built. A reader could easily scrounge through the mind of the protagonist. Her thoughts, feelings, everything is portrayed well. Even the others, their language, posture, everything gives a clear idea of who they are.

The reason I reduced a point is that there were some minor flaws in the character that weren't portrayed well.

Story progression (10/10) :

I just loved the way your story proceeded. Slow pace and gripping as well. Everything is detailed and lovely. Keep it up.

Writing style (8/10) :

You have a beautiful writing style of course but sometimes you forget to split the sentences, which was mostly noticed in the prologue of the story. Also, some letters had been typed in the wrong way - 'o' as 'ō' and 'c' as 'ç' were some of them I noticed. I don't know if you've deliberately put it out or not, but it isn't useful anyway. Also, no one's POV is inapt. You can put a few stars to complete the point of view of the protagonist and write as a third person. It doesn't matter.

Enjoyment (9/10) :

Fantastic, it was. I enjoyed it. Your story seems a good choice. There's no debate with that. However, I kind of felt some places lagging, but it was minor.

Plot (15/20) :

This scoring goes to the liking of each reader because I personally hate stories including gangs and mafias, it's a Wattpad cliché where action is always promised. However, I kind of enjoyed the action in the story, the description, all so well.

You're good to go when changes and construction are done. Good luck.

Total score : 80/100

Thank you. Hope it helps.