Author~> iamjeonmishmee

Book~> Revenge

Status~> Completed

~Cover 7/10

The cover was simple, yet it effectively portrayed everything it should have. It gave readers a clear view of what the plot could be. Adding the images of the main characters was a plus point, and I appreciate the suitable size of the title on it.

While these were the strengths of the cover, now I'd mention its weaknesses. The images on the cover need polishing. The tagline, "Get ready to pay for your deeds," was somewhat difficult to read due to its small font size, and the comma/full stop after "ready" was unnecessary. Consider using a larger font for it. 

~Title 4/10

The title felt a little plain. Although it foreshadowed the plot, it would be a lot better if the author changed it to something more original. I encourage the author to come up with a different title. To check whether it is overused or not, you could try searching on a browser or on Wattpad. 

~Description  4/10

The description was brief with dialogue and a line. The sentence at the last was hooking and caught my attention the most despite the grammatical errors. The existing blurb could benefit from clearing out errors and writing an engaging start. For better understanding of the author, I have written a blurb for them and they could try writing something similar.

What the author had originally written:

"I swear y/n ! ,pray that I won't survive, If I do , I will make your life a living hell " .... Taehyung promised while his eyes glistened with grief and rage .......... ..........."Hello Love !!!"☆When misunderstanding occurs, nothing can end happily.......

After clearing out errors and editing:

When misunderstandings occur, nothing can end happily.

"She told us to burn you!" A low chuckle followed. "And you thought that she loved you? How adorable." The laughter echoed in the almost empty basement. The shutters shivered whenever one of them would clap. Taehyung stared down at his feet with wide eyes. His pupils got smaller, and he felt himself shake.

All he wanted was love, but she just wanted him dead?

~First impression 8/10

I actually loved the first chapter. It kept me hooked and ended with a cliffhanger. The scenes felt straight out of a movie, and I had fun reading it! While I enjoyed the chapter, its errors and lack of descriptive writing led me to deduct two points.

~Plot 5/15

The first chapter did pretty well but the story needs refinement within a few aspects. The plot felt immature at times due to vague character decisions and actions, as they were not fully explained. I advice looking over the ending too. 

Adding explanations or developing these decisions with more chapters could make the story feel more logical and lead to character development.

As a work of imagination, some parts may not make sense. But, addressing key 'How?' or 'Why?' questions could strengthen the plot's logic.

~Grammar and punctuation 4/15

The grammar and punctuation need significant attention and editing. Issues like missing punctuation, double spaces and subject-verb disagreement stood out to me. 

Typing the story on MS Word or writing on a paper, could eliminate errors beforehand before publishing on Wattpad. As I always say, never publish the work before at least reviewing it twice. It could not only help clearing out small typos or grammatical errors, but also benefit from rewriting contexts for a smoother flow.

Additionally, I recommend exploring wide concepts of grammar to add depth into writing, which could effectively attract readers. Moreover, the author had told in most of the story; show, don't tell. To show instead of telling, write about how it smells, taste, sounds and feels. While 'telling' is important, the whole story should not be an info dump.

Instead of simply stating, 'She was scared', you could express it through her actions or expressions like:

'Her palms sweated and her heart pounded in her chest, the foreign yet familiar feeling settled at the pit of her stomach'.

The latter one expressed actions, the emotions were conveyed and also flows good. 

~Characters 2/10

The characters lacked emotional impacts, diverse personalities and development. They were not focused on while the plot progressed hastily. Take Y/n for an instance, her emotions and thoughts were not well depicted, so her character fell short to unsophisticated and felt plot-driven.

How to make characters intriguing?

It is easy once the author grips it. The dialogue is a massive weapon one can use to hook readers and make a character interesting. Distinct personalities, likes/dislikes and the backstory of a character brings the plot to life. Adding flaws and dynamics in character makes it more entertaining and immersive. 

~Pacing  2/10

The pacing felt rushed, as if the author hurried through the story. The pacing was the reason why I could not explore the characters and the world. It was all too fast. This led to a vague view of the story for the readers.

To slow down, describe settings, people, their movements to convey their emotions and add color to your world.

~Overviews 6/10

I personally feel that the story is quite good and can achieve a good amount of audience if the author strives more to improve it. Writing a good story is tricky and typical, and sometimes, even I find it hard. However, learning and improving is possible. I suggest working on grammar, pace and characters. 

Total 42/100

Writing may be tricky, but our imagination can conquer it all!