Reviewer: Eloeide

Book: Mariana Luanthes by strickingshadow

Genre: Fantasy
Chapters read: 6 out of 11.
Rating: ★★★☆☆

The narrative unfolds with Mariana, a distinctive protagonist devoid of magical powers in a world where everyone else possesses them. Its eye-catching elements, including a beautiful cover and an appropriately fancy title, set an appealing tone for what lies ahead. The blurb enriches the reader's understanding, though a deeper exploration of Mariana's personal life could enhance the narrative.

Mariana's journey begins with her transfer to Fantasma Academy, establishing a chosen one plot structure. Navigating her new school and life, mysterious dreams add layers to the unfolding storyline. While the first chapter introduces Mariana well and depicts her complicated life, more details are needed to address lingering uncertainties about the time and setting.Examining characters and arc plots, the first arc of moving to a new school is intriguing, introducing unnatural elements that create anticipation. The story skillfully weaves fantasy with a modern touch, incorporating rich characters and exploring mysteries surrounding an apparently ordinary pet.

Regarding language elements, the formal tone in dialogue hints at a specific setting, possibly ancient or affluent. Clarifying this context could enrich the reader's experience. Flow is occasionally disrupted by abrupt transitions, demanding more vivid descriptions of surroundings, especially given the welcomed use of images. Expanding on fantasy elements, city appearance, and transportation methods would heighten immersion. Short chapters could benefit from increased depth. The writing style requires more clarity in descriptions, though references to movies, books, and series add a modern touch with a hint of fantasy. Grammar is generally sound, with minor punctuation adjustments needed.

In summary, the narrative blends Mariana's unique journey with magical elements, promising an engaging story. Improvements in descriptive depth, contextual clarity, and punctuation would elevate the overall reading experience.

Scorecard:

The eye-catching elements (Cover, Title, Blurb): 12/15

The first chapter/prologue (Did you buy me as a reader with it?): 15/20

Arcs, Main plot, Characters (Do they feel like magic?): 21/35

The language elements (Dcition, Flow, Writing style, Grammar): 22.5/30

Overall: 70.5/100