Hunter by: shanayaepisode
Requested by: shanayaepisode

First let's talk about the cover of the book. The cover is alright. It's okay for what you're trying to go for with the romance element of the story.

Next is the summary of the book. The summary was okay but I thought there could have been more to it and that it could use a bit of work. I would recommend that you edit it a bit more and other than that, it should be good.

Next is the writing structure and grammatical errors. First let's talk about the writing structure for the book. The writing structure was fine and I didn't really find anything wrong with it. Next let's talk about the grammatical errors. I did find a few grammatical errors that do need to be fixed along with sentence structure since it made some sentences feel very awkward and kind of hard to read at times. Okay, so I know that English isn't your first language which is fine since I could tell you tried your best to really write in a language that wasn't your native language which I think is pretty cool to be honest. But with that being said, I still think you could really take the time to go back and edit the book and maybe do a few practice rounds of maybe writing in English since some of the sentences need to be edited due to the grammatical errors or even have a dictionary while writing the story since it can be a helpful tool when you want to use or look up a certain word.

Next is the pacing and plot of the story. First let's talk about the pacing. The pacing is okay, though I wish we had a bit more time knowing the main female character first before meeting the main male lead. Like if we didn't get to meet him until like chapter 3 or chapter four rather than at the end of chapter 1 and chapter 2. I will go more depth into this when I get to the characters. Next is the plot. The plot of the book was fine and was interesting enough for a romance book about two people who go from enemies to lovers.

Next is the settings/descriptions and characters of the book. Let's talk about the characters of the book first.

Okay, so where should I begin with these characters. Let's start with maybe the first meeting since I did say that I was going to talk more about it in depth earlier. So, like I mentioned earlier, I wish we had more time to know the main female character before meeting the main male character and that if he had been introduced in like chapter 3 or 4 or maybe even later. This I felt like would have given readers more time to really know the main female character and what her situation was prior to her moving in with the main male character and given a week to kill him and complete her mission. Plus, it would show a bit more of her personality other than her being sassy and a killer. I also felt like since you're switching between point of views between the main characters, I felt like there could have been a chapter or maybe two of it being in the main male character's point of view to show how he ended up and what he was up to before meeting the main female character. I just felt like I didn't know much about their personalities and such, other than was already given in the first four chapters plus on top of not really have any relationship build up between the main male character's bodyguard and the main female character's friend which honestly disappointed me a bit since I wanted to see more of what they were like prior to the fated meeting.

Finally let's talk about settings/descriptions. Definitely think that the settings need to be described more in the book. I just felt like there was too little descriptions of places and people. I also felt it was unnecessary to show pics of what the characters could possibly look like in the book if you're already going to describe them in the book later on.

It would have been fine if you had just described them without the pics since I felt like it would have been a good and sort of a missed opportunity for you to practice describing stuff or people in English and writing in English in general since English isn't your first language. Also I felt like you could have described the city and surroundings more in the book. Like I know most people may have an idea of what New York looks like but still, it would be a good idea to describe the city. Like there were many people, what did the main characters houses looked like etc. it also kind of plays into what the characters are doing at a certain point or time throughout the story.

I also want to quickly mention that when the two main characters meet, I wished you described how the people were maybe running away in fear and maybe screaming cause of the main characters having guns pointed at each other. I kind of find it hard to believe that the people around them would be so calm about them just randomly on the street pointing guns at each other like it's nothing. But if your intent was to have this interaction without anyone screaming or running away then I felt like this would have been better placed in a park with not too many people around or in a alleyway somewhere. This would have made more sense to me since in most cases, I feel like people would be running away in fear or calling the police of suddenly someone pulled out a gun and aimed at someone else. This would have made more sense of she got bumped into and accidentally kissed the main male character and fell over rather than them just standing there and having someone walk by and bumped into her since everyone would have been in a panic and probably not looking where they're going in the chaos.

Overall, it's okay but it needs a bit more work and a bit of editing and it should be good.

Thanks for letting me review your book.

-Traveler_lilly