The U in Us by: nah_tasha05
Requested by: nah_tasha05
Reviewed by: GwynethStarks

First of all, the cover is good. Though a bit too common on this platform. I do suggest a bit of work on the cover to make it more unique and eye catching.

The summary is sound but needs editing due to some grammar and punctuation errors.

The plot is really engaging and I found it hard to stop reading! I especially liked how interesting and unique the storyline was. As a person who's not a big fan of romance and whatnot, this one is quite the exception. I honestly can't express how intriguing the story is.

I noticed quite a lot of grammar errors in the first few chapters and how most of the writing is telling and not enough showing. Editing should fix it up. I'd suggest reading more original books and articles to help improve the author's writing style. A lot of practice would go a long way.

Plus, there aren't enough descriptions and scenery in the book. It makes it kind of hard to visualize the story and this clashes with the great storyline in general.

At first glance, the characters seem like they have depth but after reading a few chapters I realized that most of their emotions and feelings aren't being portrayed well. I felt like I was just reading words and not a story. The reader should feel a connection with the characters. Like I mentioned earlier, the writer should read more published books and articles. Those helped me a lot when I started writing. Plus a bit of research would help concerning the situation and condition Allegra is in.

Even though the story has two main characters, I feel like we aren't getting enough of Aiden. Sure he hates his life and the fake people around him but it doesn't seem like there's more to him. He has to have a hobby or something. Something that makes him genuinely happy or makes him really smile. I get the feeling he has a soft side but after reading more than ten chapters I really didn't see it.

To be honest, the side characters feel more like cardboard cutouts to me. It's their meant to serve a certain role then that's it! We don't know about their lives or if they even have one. As a fighter for the recognition, importance and rights of characters besides the main characters, I believe in each character having a story of their own. Make them realistic. Don't make them only for the reason of helping your MC or contributing to the story in a certain way, give them thoughts, beliefs and feelings outside of the MC's circle. Everyone has a story. Some are simply shown through their actions and words. (Whew, that left me breathless).

Some of the conversations between the characters are a bit confusing. Or example, (spoiler alert; read at your own risk) when Allegra nonchalantly confronted her aunt about her affair with her boss and her aunt just waved her off about it. Honestly though, if anyone said something like that to their aunt, she's karate chop their behinds (seeing as they're Spanish, that is the most likely outcome. Not a racist but my family's kind of like that). Even if she didn't care, she (as anyone else) would want her niece to look up to her and classify her as a gold digger. (Even though she's technically one. Just saying what I read).

The pacing is steady and good. It gives us time to move along with the characters.

Overall, it is quite an interesting read and one of the best stories I've enjoyed reading so far on Wattpad.

Thanks for letting me review your book. -GwynethStarks

I hope you enjoyed reading this review and can't wait to see everyone in the next review. Until next time.

-Traveler_lilly