A Bit About the Author:

katelynmckelle is Wattpad featured author whose novel, What Heroes Are, made it to the Wattys 2018 Longlist. She is a college student who loves writing clean literature and superhero stories and fairytale retellings, usually with female leads. 

Title:

Nice and short. I particularly like it because it's simple, easy to remember, and has that mystical "ooooo!" feeling to it. Maybe it's just me, but I was interested in this story from the start just by the title alone--and that's hard to do for me. ;) 

Cover: 

I like the cover. It's readable and makes me interested in the story. My only critique is that it gives off a steampunk vibe and your story isn't steampunk. 

Blurb: 

The blurb is short and gives off just the right amount of information. I like it. :D My critiques on it are grammar-wise. Last line, first paragraph, there should be a comma after team. And then in the second paragraph, you used a hyphen in one place and an em dash in another. Please keep it consistent. A comma would also easily work in that hyphen's place as well. And another thing. This is just personal preference; I'm just throwing it out there--you can take it or leave it. What about putting an And before the "When the past..." in the last line and/or making it another paragraph? I don't know; just thought it makes it more dramatic, but that just might be me. 

The Good:

For a first draft, this story is pretty impressive. *looks at her own first drafts and cringes* I do have a few issues, but I'll mention those later. 

Your strong point, I would say, is definitely your characterization. I was able to picture each of your characters easily in my head (and I have to say I imagined none of them like your casting xD) and see them interact with each other and keep their separate personalities apart. This was an excellent part of the story and one of the reasons I love it so much now. Amazing work this this! 

Plot would be your second strongest point. There were sections that did feel filler, but it's nothing that editing won't fix. Overall, this part was also well done and the actions scenes were easy for me to picture and follow along when reading your story. And your cliffhangers were well executed. Good job. 

The Bad: 

Don't worry, nothing serious. 

My main issues were grammar wise. There were places where there were typos and stuff like that, the usual grievance of first drafts. And many times, your wording or word pacing didn't flow as well as I would like it to. It wasn't serious enough to get thrown out of the story, but it should be worked on more so your story really shines. 

And like I said above, plot should be smoother. It wasn't bad at all, but I would like it to flow more so it feels like a seamless transition to beginning to end. 

Oh, one more thing. Many times during actions scenes, you'd switch to future tense like "He would do such and such" and while that is grammatically incorrect, it feels awkward when everything else is in past tense and it's too much telling. Either show us what's happening in some way, or at least just don't put it in "would" or anything like that. That, honestly, was my biggest issue with the whole story. 

What the Reader Thought:

I have to admit, this story was better than I expected. Granted, I haven't read that many super heroes stories at all (aside from seeing some Marvel films *cough* and planning a couple stories of my own, some of which are similar in some ways to yours strangely enough O.O), but this was very thrilling and satisfying to read. You surprised me. 

One thing I loved about your story WAS THAT IT WAS CLEAN!!!!!!!!!!!! There was no smash in it (yes, that's a word I coined. Ask in the comments if you want to know...) and thank goodness no language. Honestly. Language in a story can so kill it for me. I'll still read it if I like the story, but my high esteem of it has gone low. (Unless it's The Book Thief, in which case I bought my own copy and proceeded to black out all the bad words with pen. Shameless, I know.)

I really enjoyed getting to know your characters. Justice, her description sounded so much like me it rather creeped me out. (Seriously though, blonde hair and a button nose? How in...) I still ship her with Psych though and the ending, while author-wise made me proud, reader-wise made me want to cry. (Not giving details because I don't want to spoil.) I would definitely encourage you to build up the suspense more towards the end so it's way more emotionally impacting. That way, I'll definitely cry. ;P 

One more thing, and this is the biggest thing that stood out to me in a negative way. Our famous monsieur Garrett. *attempts a fake French accent* Better known to some as Captain Martinez. I could not for the life of me picture him as a young cute guy for the longest time. Honestly. I think it was because you never really described him (that I remembered, anyway) besides his eyes and his personality (which was too smooth in the beginning and I didn't trust him, even though he's a sweetheart{sorry spoilers}). I need a description of him right off the bat. Because all I could see was this middle-aged donut lover. And that kinda disgusted me to connect him with Ren. Now, when I saw your casting, things started clicking. (Ironically enough, I had Pysche and Garrett switched around as far your casting went. XD Totally opposite looks going on there) But I think this should use some more work so other people don't think the same thing I did for most of the story. Lol

All in all, I really loved this story and I can't wait to get started on the sequel! Maybe I'll catch up before you start book 3. :D 

Score: 9/10