Author - SamairaRajput
Book name - Manan ~ fate

Reviewer - Siya_the_writer

Note :- I am extremely sorry dear . There was a confusion between the forms and that's why you name slipped up between them . I am sorry once again for this delayed review !

Review

Title :-

The title is good , it conveys the inner message of the story about Manan that no matter what happens , they are fated to be together !

Good job on choosing the apt one .

Cover :-

The cover looks good but it needs some work to make it even more attractive . I do know that you are a cover designer yourself and I am sure you will spare some time to make it even more beautiful with your skills .

Blurb :-

The blurb was enough to make me click the 'read' option . The little questions you have asked in the blurb made me curious to read . Not very attractive but just enough for the readers to click into it .

I see you had no prologue , but for a story like this...I wouldn't recommend one because the chapter One already did that job .

Having prologue is only to make the readers hook into the story and get to know the characters , the chapter One did justice to make sure that .

So , good Job once again .

Plot :-

It's been a long time since I've read a story on this theme . It was quite rare and the way you penned it down is just a bliss to read .

The suspense , the love , the aggression , the brutal punishments and tortures are just overwhelming .

Be it Manik's undenying and strong love for Nandhini , cabir and abhimanyu's relation with Manan , especially their slight nok-jhoks and their beautiful friendship with manik , nandhini's strong yet submissive character and of course , Anshuman's behaviour .

Everything is just a plus for the story .

I like how you kept the present going on with a glimpse of past coming in between the scenes . They just made me curious to know what had happened in the past that separated our manan .

I have to say this , but I felt manik's pain and Nandhini's yearning to be with him throughout the story . It's just so heart wrenching reading those chapters which expressed their love and their yearning to meet each other , also the lyrics along with the scenes only made magic .

But , I sensed a slight let down when Manan across each other in New York . You carried the story very well till the point , filled with their emotions , their pains , their loves for each other and thoughts .

When it actually came to major part that everyone including me was waiting for , I missed the impact that it is supposed to give .

Manik's reaction had less impact on me than I imagined it to be , also nandhini's side .

The scene could have been written in a better version and I seriously hope , you take a look back at it .

I know its difficult to pen it down , but you have penned down the entire story beautifully than expected , and I know you could do this one also , just spare some time on it .

This is the only thing I could find in your story as a let down , rest was good .

Characters ;-

I can very well see that your character sketch is perfectly done .

Each character had a significant role and they made sure to make us feel the way , they felt .

Manik's character was a unique one , the way he carried both his love life and his professional life together . His nature of forgiving nandhini and of course , his love for her .

It was like a sweet and sour character , one time you see him all gloomy and the next scene , you see him smirking and hell bent on making nandhini his .

Its just a double treat for manan fans !

His authoritative tone and his professional set up is just a perfect match . I am glad that you showed both the monster and the romantic side of manik and how well they are different from each other .

Coming to nandhini's character ,

She is also one of my favourite character in the story . She is strong , independent and bold women who acts submissive in order to protect her loved ones .

At first , I felt angry at nandhini for letting anushman do whatever he is doing to her . But later knowing about her backup story , I found the character's essence .

I also love the fact that she still is lively and keeps the bold act together whenever the matter concerns manik .

Her portrayal is one of the best part of the story .

Now , my absolute favourite character  (you must think , I am mad .)

ANUSHMAN , okay first of all....Hats off , I have never hated a man or a villain  than I've hated Anushman .

Kudos for that .

It's not everyday , all villains act according to their role . In short span , his character made me question about humanity and I absolutely hated his guts and all about him .

His cunning talks , his ruthless punishments , his attitude , his way of addressing nandhini , his care for Aarav and yes , of course his plan on breaking Manan apart .

Everything about him screams 'villain' . What , it's been only six chapters and I have already started hating him . Well , good job on that note .

His character is the ultimate plus point of your story , no doubt in that .

Cabir , abhimanyu , mukti and navya have their own screen presence which is apt and perfect in one of a kind .

Their friendship with manik , their concern over him and nandhini , them helping Manan to get back , cabir and abhi's advices to manik , everything just adds icing on the cake .

Grammar and sentence formation :

You definitely have good grip on grammar , no doubt on that context . The way you penned down the story shows how much potential you have inside you .

The dialogues are another plus of the story , they convey the exact message that is supposed to be communicated . They also help us remember our own break-ups and our own pain/struggles .

The dialogues were a bliss to read .

The flow of the story is uniform neither fast nor slow , just on the par .

One thing , I am concerned about is...the initial chapters had a lot of hindi dialogues , which might become difficult for readers to read through . You should consider adding English translations , so it can reach the varied audience .

Otherwise , its perfect and I know...hindi phrases are what makes the story perfect with the inner meanings in those beautiful lyrics behind the scenes .

Conclusion ;-

The story is really good . I would recommend it to all the Manan fans out there . Its only been six chapters but I already feel that I read a whole story , good job dear , keep it up .

Please do update , I will be waiting along with the others .

Note :- Sorry if I sounded rude anywhere , please do take my suggestions . I hope this review helps you .
All the best for your future works dearie ××

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