Author - Shivikalover2333
Book name - Love while reading

Reviewer - Ryan_the_king

Note :- This is my first time reviewing . So beware 🙏

Review

Title :-

Hm , to be Frank it wasnt a apt one . You could have maybe opted for 'wattpad love' because the story revolves under the context of wattpad and that's how they got together .

Yes , the title does justify the story because the Male lead falls in love with the female lead while reading her fanfic , so on that basis this just clears the border .

But , In order to attract readers , its always good to change the title to even more attractive one .

Cover :-

This was a one shot , hence it didnt specially have a cover as it was in the book called 'virat kholi imagines' , so I cant judge based on the cover .

Blurb/Prolouge :-

There was no prologue or blurb outside the book , so I cant judge based on this also .

It is always good to have a blurb outside a story as readers will most likely choose based on the blurb or prologue .

Plot :-

A simple yet cute love story of virat kholi falling in love with (Y/N) female lead by reading her fanfics regarding him .

I like how you didnt wander off and focused only on the main couple .

There wasnt much of a dialogue for each person but your narrative style was impressive .

See , this isnt the first time I've come across a concept like this but I must say , it was definently worth a shot . Your narration was everything to the story and the short dialogues here and there was just a icing on the cake .

I enjoyed reading how they eventually fall in love by chatting and becoming online friends . You have explained the actual scenario of how wattpaders make friendship which turns into a beautiful everlasting relationship .

Good job .

But , what I find superficial is the fact that virat downloaded wattpad for the first time and directly found her story out of all the other fanfics out there .

Also , there was no mention of the author or the story being popular and I have no idea how he stumbled onto her fanfic first .

But , I know this is what they call fate and they are attracted towards each other by a invisible string called destiny . (Forgive me for reading a lot of love stories)

Otherwise , the story is fine .

Character development :-

Virat kholi character was likeable inspite of being a major star , he downright was humble in story and I like his sweet nature here .

(Y/N) female lead was also a good portrayal . 

There is nothing much about their character development .

This story was hundred percent clichè , hence it worked well with their characters being a bit clichè too .

Grammar / Sentence formation :-

Good grip on grammar . The story was a smooth flow without much major mistakes , only typos here and there , and some punctuation mistakes but the  rest was fine and I absolutely love that about the story .

I am not a grammar nazi , as along as the story is readable it's fine with me .

Proof reading would be advisable before publishing the story , otherwise the writing is good .

Conclusion :-

It was a sweet , simple and short journey . I would recommended it to people who love to read fanfics on virat kholi .

I would recommend you to change the title for a better reach and rest , as I said before it's worth a shot !

Keep it up and good luck for your future projects !

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