Book name - love changes life season 2
Author - NehaRai0
Reviewer - Siya_the_writer

PAYMENT

A permanent follow

Review

Coming to the cover ,

The cover is good , simple yet elegant enough for the book .
Simple suggestion is try changing the fonts a bit and the colour . It's a bit not clear , otherwise the cover is good enough for the story .

Coming to the title ,

The title is too simple , but its apt for the story strangely because it signifies sanskar's character .

Hence , its good .

Coming to the blurb/prologue,

Now there is a big problem with the blurb . I like that you have included a scene from the story but , the writing isnt clear enough for the readers to understand what's going .

If I have to read a story , I will mostly look into the blurb before considering but there isnt anything in the blurb to make me dive into the story .

The blurb appears to be simple and blunt without any triggers and hook up points . Even the questions you have posted outside , didnt want me to look into it .

Also , there wasnt a prologue hence I cant judge it based on that .
Having a prologue helps the readers to connect to the story better . Please do consider having one while editing .

Coming to the plot,

A very interesting plot . A plot that readers will like to read because of the funny nok-jhoks in the family , the love and care shown by her bhaiyu and ansh , the sweet yet hatred love story of Swasan and swara's bubbly nature , everything just works perfectly !

The pace of the story is uniform , which is one of the best element in the story . You dont rush it nor the story lags anywhere .

The story is a perfect commercial element and yes , readers will enjoy reading it .

The plot is simply good . This is a usual plot but the way its expressed is different .

Good work on that .

But , there Is no chliffhangers except for the fact of sanskar's mysterious character .

Having more chliffangers will help your readers get interested and turn to next chapter otherwise , they will lose their interest quickly and move on .

Coming to the characters ,

I like sanskar's arrogant and mysterious character . It's always attracting when the Male lead is dominating or showing arrogance . His character is perfect , the way he is suffering inside but shows a hard posture outside .

Swara's character is fine too . Her bubbly nature and her determination to bring back sanskar inspite of him being utterly rude to her . Her comebacks are almost funny and cracks  me up sometimes in serious situations .

Ansh , laksh , kushi , arnav and all others present were good enough . Their care and funny moments stood out for me while reading the story .

The characters are really good . Inspite of having too many characters , you have did justice to each one of them .

Coming to the grammar ,

Okay , now the bigger problem is with your grammar and your style of writing .

There are too many punctuation mistakes , the grammar tenses are wrong at many places .

Also , there is no gap between each paragraph since the story is written in the form script , it is difficult to identify where the sentence ends .

It's too clumsy and is very difficult to read .

Since you have such good plot , try adding gaps between each dialogue . Continuous dialogues without gaps will make readers get irritated while trying to find who is saying what .

But to an extent , its readable .

Try editing it down properly , so that it's easier for people to read .

Points to improve ,

• grammar and tenses used in the story .

• Addings gaps in between dialogues and in between two paragraphs while describing the scenario .

• Editing is highly needed .

• Avoid usage of ellipsis .

• Adding more chliffhangers .

• Try changing the blurb .

Good part of the story ,

• The plot

• The characters are fun to read about .

• SwaSan's arrogant -sweet relationship .

• uniform pace in the story .

Overall the story is good , if you improve all the points stated above  then I am sure the story will reach a lot of readers and they will absolutely enjoy it .

Note :- I am sorry if I was harsh . This is just to help your story to get better . I hope this review helps you !

Thank you ,
#siya