Reviewer - Siya_the_writer

Book name - Back to you
Author- StarsAndFireflies_

P.A.Y.M.E.N.T

A follow !

R.E.V.I.E.W

Coming to the cover ,

The cover is as fine as the story's theme . I loved the way its blended and its misty/fog look .

It's simple yet elegant . But , you could have maybe highlighted the fonts , the word especially 'you' Is not visible . Its just a minor change and I hope it is more visible .

Otherwise , the cover looks splendid . Kudos the designer !

Coming to the title ,

The title is apt . The story isnt completed yet but what I can say is , it's just a suitable one .

I am big fan of thirteen reasons why and I love the song 'back to you' by selena Gomez . Just like that song , your story conveys the secret love (crush) of nandhini to manik .

The title is in fact a most used one , but this storyline is something different and hence it makes the title unique .

Coming to the blurb/prologue ,

The blurb was very interesting and that's what made me click on the read button real quick .

It was beautifully penned and made the readers curious about what was going on inside the book !

I read a lot of novels and books here on wattpad and find the same blurb being passed down , but this was different from the usual ones . It had a unique touch that drew me into the book .

Good job on that .

The aesthetic boards and the colourful gifs with beautiful quotes and lines revealing a certain traits of the character was something new and extraordinary .

Aesthetic was amazing , you are a great designer , no doubt in that for sure .
The introduction was good with all these , something different in our fandom books !

Coming to the plot ,

The plot is a mystery . When I read the blurb I thought it was a normal love story but reading the first chapter , I was baffled .

This book gave me insidious vibes at the starting and I felt I was reading some kind of horror book that I had to revisit the blurb to check it out !

The plot is simply amazing , this is not a rare one but I like how you portrayed it .
This is like the mature version of all the stories like best friend or best friend's boyfriend love story you find in wattpad .

It does kind of seems ordinary but the quotes and beautiful lines you've added in the story just tops everything .

The emotions flowing in the story just makes me want to read it again and again .

Manan scenes are amazing . I like the supportive side of manik !
Their interaction makes me feel that they will be best if they are just friends , something that I never felt before reading Manan stories .

I especially loved the chapter where manik gives 'thirteen reasons to live' to nandhini . It was very unique and very different . Kudos to that !

The book mostly consist of nandhini's point of view towards her family , her pain , struggles and her interaction with manik .

So basically it's simple but unique due to the writing and portrayal.

For a person who reads novels and literatures , this book is a treat .

Coming to the characters ,

Manik's characters blew me away . His dialogues , his antics and the way he cares for nandhini is the sweetest .

Manik character in accordance to kyy is so different here , that I almost forgot about 'monster manik' and I had now changed him to 'angel manik' instead .

Nandhini is just the typical girl , whose thoughts and views are like a introvert and her story is very saddening . I felt my heart break when her mother died , you did a great job explaining the portion well .

Well , I am unsure on why her father left her in first place and now is back in her life ?
The story has just started and I guess you will reveal it in the further parts .

Her father is complicated, I cant seem to understand him . He keeps saying "sorry" for everything and is not revealing on why he is staying here , even though I want to sympathize with him , I just cant seem to .

Also , about his second wife is a total mystery, hope we will get to know about it sooner .

Now ,
Aliya and cabir arent very much in the scene and I seriously cant accept the the fact that aliya is nandhini's best friend because manik seems to be filling that portion instead of aliya , but I like mukti's role , she is just like I pictured her to be .

Grammar and tenses ,

The lines as said are beautiful . The tenses and the grammars are perfect ! The punctuations are on point to .

But , there are some words missing and there are certain typo's .

Like I found this 'ans' instead of 'and' in one of the chapter .

I am not a grammar and spelling nazi but since your story is perfect , these minor things could be changed that it boosts your perfect one to even higher levels !

You could just proof read once before publishing and that will help you.

Points to focus :-

• The story lacks cliffhangers . I seriously dont find any meaning to move on next chapter except to read manik and nandhini's friendship and nandhini's life struggles and how she copes up .

A story definently needs some elements or cliffhangers to make readers hook into it , which is a major miss here .

• In the blurb , its mentioned that manik was nandhini's childhood crush , but in the chapters , I find nandhini missing out major emotions that needs to be portrayed and also she doesnt know many things of about him .

In my opinion , if I have a crush on someone I will definently know some things about him .

But nandhini seems not to , otherwise .
She doesnt show any kind of emotions according to her characterization towards manik .

I know she has accepted that he is her friend's 'boyfriend' but I dont think that makes her less emotive towards him .

I feel you should focus more on her emotions towards manik as it almost feels superficial that she isnt to her crush .

This is just my opinion .

• Aliya is not like a best friend to nandhini in my opinion . She isnt there when nandhini needs someone .

I don't find her constantly checking on nandhini too . She keeps leaving to some or the other classes mostly .

A 'friend' can be like that but when we call someone a 'bestfriend' , they are supposed to care for each other and be there .

But Aliya seems to have minor portions here . Hence , I dont find or get very much 'best friend' vibes from her .

Please do focus on her character .

Best parts of the story ,

• Manik's characterization

• Manan interactions

• Lines and quotes used in the story .

• smooth flow of story with less suspense .

• Nandhini' characterization , her backup story and her ability to cope up and not be a coward

Overall , the story is fine as silk just some points needed to be focused to make is a perfect and amazing one !

I would recommend this story for ardent Manan fans and people who love being immersed in the storyline with amazing quotes empowering it .

~ Hope this review helps you . I am sorry if I was harsh , this is just a point of view from a normal reader and my advice for you to improve . Please dont take it to heart .

All the best for your works !

#siya