Final Total: 6.1 (we're opening the book and starting to read. . .)

Reader 1:

Cover: 2/4 I take it this is hand drawn. Pretty dang cool, if so. However, it's off center and the 'V' is all but touching the edge of the Wattpad frame... and unfortunately, I can't really get any genre out of it. It looks like it could be a children's story, but that's not what I find in the blurb. That said, it's whimsical and cute and one-of-a-kind, and I probably would pick up the book just to see what it was. I'm on the fence. Either way, I would definitely suggest adding a touch of color somewhere, because the monochrome makes a lie out of the title.

Title: 2/2 I like it. It relates to the blurb fairly well, with the sex dreams.

Blurb: 1/4 Grammar: 'twenty-something Torontonian() going about her business in the city.' Second paragraph, 'out' x 2.

Notes: Turn the questions at the end into statements. "In the middle of figuring out a way home, Moxie discovers that she may be caught up in something much bigger than herself.' Then move from there into the actual question of the resolution. 'Fighting her way through intergalactic red-tape, she must use all her Moxie moxie to outwit the aliens who kidnapped her, or never get back to Toronto.' (Totally just a suggestion.) How much story is there in this story? Because this feels like there should be a heck of a lot more to it. There's either a lot left out of this, or it's a short story. I think you could probably give a little bit more detail. How does she wind up stuck in another world, for starters. That's your inciting incident, and a little bit of detail there would help define your main conflict. Her main conflict is a bit scarce, too. If she's caught up in something much bigger than herself, then all the rest of the story is just backdrop for that, and you need to go into more detail about what sort of obstacles she faces, and what will happen if she doesn't get home. Right now it's too vague to really grab my attention.

Total: 5 (I've put the book back on the shelf)

Reader 2:

Cover: 2/4 The V in Vivid is sliding off the edge which means the size ratio isn't right. With the title VIVID, I'd expect a colour burst on the cover, not black and white. That doesn't look terribly vivid to me. I think the mergirl is either dreaming or floating in space, both of which are passive things that don't excite much emotional response or intellectual interaction. The placement of the letters of the title/author name as well as the choice of font is creative and reminiscent of a Tim Burton movie poster. Still, it needs colour.

Title: 1.5/2 It's fine. Doesn't really grab and shake me, but I wouldn't pass it by either.

Blurb: 2.5/4

Excellent start, there just needs to be a bit more detail in there in answer to some fairly basic questions. How did she get to this other world? A magical portal? Drugs? And what's stressing her out so much there? From the cover, it looks like she's not doing much but having sex dreams (which...why not, that's a story, too!). So, where's the hassle? Right now, what the story sounds like to me is that she's on a drug trip or in virtual reality, somehow. That's what the last line "something bigger than herself" would tell me. That the whole situation isn't real. A "Matrix" thing, if you will. If that's not what you intend, then perhaps mentioning where the doubt comes in or hint at what 'bigger' than Moxie is, would help. The name Moxie is great, since it kind of means "bad ass". But, if this Moxie has aggressive, progressive spirit and faces challenges head-on, isn't exactly evident from the blurb. (And it's nice not to see "Moxie was a bad ass blah blah blah, as if that's something to be proud of.)

Total: 6 (I'm interested in opening the book)

Reader 3:

Cover: 3/4

Caterpillar-snake woman :)

Would you be able to make the whole image part a bit smaller, and centre it, with more of the starry sky showing around the edges? The fact that the illustration is just a bit too large is my only issue here. Everything else is rather lovely. The fonts feel whimsical but are easy to read, the composition of the illustration is nice, and the illustration itself is nice. I don't really know what the book will be about just from looking at it, but I'm sure it will involve some sort of multi-dimensional space travel, but in a literary way rather than scifi.

Title: 2/2 While I'm not sure at the moment how it relates to the story whatsoever, it is a nice title, and it interested me, which is the criteria here. So full marks.

Blurb: 2.5/4

Short and sweet. There is the main character and the main conflict, and a hint of the plot.

The thing you could work on more, in my opinion, is the second paragraph. It's just one sentence, and it is a bit convoluted. This could be a good space to introduce us to your world, beyond just saying there are mute aliens and Moxie is keeping herself turned on for some reason. Those two things also don't really seem to go well together in terms of explaining your storyline, and I find myself confused by how mute aliens and sex dreams are connected. If I may suggest, try expanding this part a bit.

Finally, the last sentence: is she caught up in something bigger than herself? You don't allude to any big-picture plot earlier in the blurb, so it seems to come out of nowhere.

Total: 7.5 (I'm interested in opening the book)