✧ Reviewer :: _Writing_Beauty_
✧ Reviewee :: Aleksandr_Vincente
✧ Book :: The New Helel

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◖Basics :: 09 | 20◗

⚘ Cover :: 02 | 05

◍ Firstly, the cover matches your story's theme, which is most certainly a fantasy one. But you could have chosen a better picture. Then, the font of the title isn't really big, quite not very visible, you can change its size and make it larger. You can, you know, add a subtitle or quote which relates to the story, it makes the cover look even more attractive. The author's name is really big, it's not a problem, but it's really big, and looks like subtitles.

⚘ Synopsis :: 03 | 05

◍ The blurb is quite good and catchy, I'll say. But quite complicated too, try to make it short and simple. You can also add some dialogues to make it more attractive, a blurb plays an important role to make the reader read your story, it should be interesting.

⚘ Title :: 04 | 05

◍ The title is new and exciting, it was to me. But it can always improve. The word 'Helel' itself is really interesting. I know the meaning, that's a different case, but it would be better if you wrote the meaning in the description, like you wrote 'shamayim' as 'heaven'.

⚘ Execution :: 03 | 05

◍ Execution matters a lot. The first few chapters are confusing, it gets better after reading ahead, but still, also you can probably make a separate introduction of the characters and adjust it before the first part. Introduction to characters helps readers to understand the characters without getting confused. The chapters are very short, one even came in just two paragraphs, you should make them bigger by at least 900-1000 words.

○ Plot & Creativity :: 06 | 10

◍ I'll say the plot and storyline is creative, quite new and not of cliché plot, to be honest, the book is interesting. About creativity, I feel like you need to improve here. Also reading the book, I feel like you need to write some parts in more detail, it feels really rushed.

○ Writing Style :: 07 | 10

◍ The writing style needs to contain more descriptions & depth. The flow was off in some places; the scenes weren't given enough time to build.

◖Grammar & Vocabulary :: 12 | 20◗

⚘ Grammar :: 07 | 10

◍ Your grammar is quite good and understanding, but everything can improve, right? You can, too, with punctuation and vocabulary. At some point, there are some mistakes with exclamations, but it's fine actually, no one catches a glimpse of it.

⚘ Vocabulary :: 05 | 10

◍ There were a vocabulary mistakes that can be fixed with a good over view from an editor but the writing was good.

○ Emotions Conveyed :: 03 | 10

◍ I didn't give quite many marks here, because again, writing in detail helps in experiencing emotions in better ways, you haven't written it in detail.

○ Character Development :: 02 | 10

◍ As for character development, I didn't see any character development yet. That may change as the book isn't completed yet, but there are so many chapters, still I don't see many chapters, maybe the reason is short chapters. You should really make some big chapters.

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Total :: 48 | 80

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