✧ Reviewer :: LunaticLxna
✧ Reviewee :: PASharp
✧ Book :: Rise of The Night Witch

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◖Basics :: 16 | 20◗

⚘ Cover :: 02 | 05

◍ The font used is really thin, it makes it quite blurred. So instead, you can use a bolder form of the same font or any other bold font. In the face claim you've used, her half body is only visible on the cover, so make sure that she's fully visible. Then, I think you've not added filters, so the blending doesn't look good, the filter blends the editing and makes the cover look prettier. The font of 'The rise of' is just so small it looks like the author's name. That's all, except that the cover is good and matches the story's theme.

⚘ Synopsis :: 03 | 05

◍ The synopsis is good and gives the reader an idea about the story. But you know you've amazingly written the book, I think you can write a better blurb. So just go through the description again and make it better. Also, the description is getting too long, the part about the story is just three paragraphs but you've written a long paragraph after it too, which shouldn't be included in the blurb part. Since those are necessary you can just write that in the intro part.

⚘ Title :: 04 | 05

◍ It's nice, actually very nice. Nothing could have been better, really interesting and creative.

⚘ Execution :: 04 | 05

◍ I appreciate how you've executed the book, it's really attractive and beautiful. I don't think you need to improve anything here, what needs to improve, I've said already and will tell you further.

○ Plot & Creativity :: 08 | 10

◍ The plot is satisfactory and extraordinary. Personally, I love fantasy stories. So, I loved it. Even though the book is not completed, it shows vast creativity. Just in 13 chapters, it's just incredible.

○ Writing Style :: 08 | 10

◍ Your way of writing is favorable and understanding. What improvement you can do is, that some parts are not as detailed as they should be, while some are stable. So, make sure to keep it reliable throughout the story.

◖Grammar & Vocabulary :: 16 | 20◗

⚘ Grammar :: 09 | 10

◍ Your grammar is decent, with no misconceptions, it's nice. The thing is, you've, at many places, haven't used verbal and action tags which makes it confusing about who is speaking.

Let's take an example, from chapter 1.9

"I don't want to accuse her for anything based on unsubstantiated rumors," Darcy said. "Join the society, network there, ask around, you'll find out what you need to know."

"I understand."

"Good, I hope you also understand that I don't have endless time. See you on Monday!"

"See you on Monday!"

In a conversation between just two people, it's not that confusing but just like this, there are many parts where verbal and action tags are absent, which makes it complicated.

I hope you work on that.

⚘ Vocabulary :: 07 | 10

◍ You do have a vast vocabulary but you know, it's not that enormous. So, you can always search for new words.

○ Emotions Conveyed :: 09 | 10

◍ Since the writing style is good, the conventional emotion is reliable. They are written in a delightful and detailed way.

○ Character Development :: 07 | 10

◍ Since there are not many parts, and the story is not completed, still the story shows the development of the characters. That's great.

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Total :: 60 | 80

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