✧ Reviewer :: CoolWhenUrBatman
✧ Reviewee :: blackbangtanblush
✧ Book :: Reunion

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◖Basics :: 6.25 | 20◗

⚘ Cover :: 0.25 | 05

◍ No title, authors name, no relation to the fic. All covers under the user are the same. Making a relatable cover with all necessary information is essential. This gives the readers a feel of the book before they click on it. It's also one of the main points of attraction. You can't just use one picture —that is barely a cover— for all your books. You can make a chat like cover to suit the book.

⚘ Synopsis :: 02 | 05

◍ I feel like adding the 'do they feel the same or' is a bit unnecessary. You could make it more interesting to read so more people will want to read the chapters. It's a group of chaotic friends, so make it chaotic. Make the readers want to click on it. Something like "a chaotic group of friends blah blah blah, naturally, chaos ensues."
Maybe it's just me, because I personally dislike synopsis that end in a question. But even if we ignore that, your synopsis lacks the attraction. 

⚘ Title :: 02 | 05

◍ Accurate to the book but not unique.

⚘ Execution :: 02 | 05

◍ To be honest, it's not very impressive. There's a lot that needs to be fixed. Please don't be offended as I'm only trying to help by being frank.

○ Plot & Creativity :: 05 | 10

◍ It's very bland. Add plot twists to keep the story interesting. They're a must, because when there's no plot twist, the plot becomes monotonous and the readers will lose interest.

○ Writing Style :: 05 | 10

◍ Lack of description, correct use of bold. Not standard writing style. I suggest looking at other books —not any book, the ones approved and promoted by Wattpad are a good example. I'm not saying read them, just look at how they're written, their vocabulary, how they express their emotions, describe stuff.

◖Grammar & Vocabulary :: 12 | 20◗

⚘ Grammar :: 04 | 10

◍ Chat-wise, there are minor mistakes, mostly articles. For example, the first line of chapter two: "I have a urge" is wrong, it should be I have 'the' urge. There are minor mistakes like this throughout the book. In the non-chat chapters, you use bold for dialogues. That's wrong. Bold is usually used to emphasize something. (You can look up the use of bold online)

Again, in dialogues, when it ends, but the person is doing an action, it ends with a comma. You don't use either a comma or a full stop.

"Hi."

"Hey," she waved.

An example of use of comma and full stop.

Wrong or lack of capitalization. Names, the beginning of a sentence, and special names need to be capitalized. Lack of commas throughout the book.

Wrong use of space, you don't add a space after and before a "

"Hey." See, no commas. And when you're using a hyphen, there's no need to put a space before and after it. For example, High-five.

Don't use abbreviations in dialogues.

I suggest either using Grammarly or google docs to proofread your chapters. Or if you have someone that is willing to beta, even better.

⚘ Vocabulary :: 08 | 10

◍ Very basic words, but they were used correctly. I can't really say use more synonyms or something like that due to the type of book it is, but spice it up a little. Make the nerd(s) use complicated words the others don't know and have them complain about it. It's not really a point for vocab but it could make the repetitiveness fade a little.

○ Emotions Conveyed :: 7.5 | 10

◍ It is certainly expressive, but again, it's a chat fic. It's more limited than other books (you might think it's the other way, but no.) chat fics are restricted because we're only reading what they type and you certainly can't type your emotions. But for a chat fic it was expressive enough but some inner thoughts in the non-chat chapters could help a lot.

○ Character Development :: 05 | 10

◍ The characters all act the same, don't have unique characteristics and there's no development. I know there's a lot of characters in the book, but try and make the unique -even in small measures- and make them have faults. Writing from their pov could also help in development.

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Total :: 40.75 | 80

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