✧ Reviewer :: BTS7ARMY8FOREVER
✧ Reviewee :: 0valeyes
✧ Book :: Oval's What if Return to Gravity Falls

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◖Basics :: 6.5 | 20◗

⚘ Cover :: 02 | 05

◍ I didn't get how the cover matched the story but the reason, that it's based on a series I don't know about so I've no idea. Also, the spiral binds are visible so crop them and the font used isn't very great and it won't attract any readers.

⚘ Synopsis :: 1.5 | 05

◍ The blurb could be made more interesting. It won't attract many readers. Add a scene, with a cliffhanger or something that'd make them wanna read it. The blurb is very short, also add in a few dialogues.

⚘ Title :: 2.5 | 05

◍ Again, I really didn't get the title or how it matched the story. Maybe it is because you mentioned that it's based on some kids' series that used to air once, which I haven't watched, so I don't have any idea. Also, the story that was written didn't match much. Adding to this, you don't have to mention 'Oval's' in the title, you can do that on the cover, but do not name your book like that.

⚘ Execution :: 01 | 05

◍ The overall presentation of the book isn't very good, according to me, you lack in a lot of areas, but let's not be demotivated, we can always improve and be better if we try and work hard, right? So, don't be disheartened by any of the criticism rather learn and grasp and work on the areas you're weak at.

○ Plot & Creativity :: 04 | 10

◍ The plot isn't well structured and very fast paced. I don't have any idea about the creativity as again it is inspired from a series I've never watched. The plot you've chosen isn't very great, to start with.

○ Writing Style :: 04 | 10

◍ The writing style isn't very amazing. The scenes aren't described well, nobody can imagine anything. There's no description of the surroundings or anything. The writing style will make a person keep the phone down, because nothing is clear in the scenes and it is not even interesting. You need to describe more and explain more.

◖Grammar & Vocabulary :: 8.5 | 20◗

⚘ Grammar :: 03 | 10

◍ There are a lot of grammatical errors, in between the sentence you've used, capital letter though they're not proper nouns. You've not used any commas or punctuation marks. And it apparently changes the whole sense of the story. There are many typos, a lot.

⚘ Vocabulary :: 5.5 | 10

◍ The vocabulary is fine but very limited. As you've not described much, so, there's not much words that were used. So, it is very less.

○ Emotions Conveyed :: 02 | 10

◍ There's literally no mention of emotions at any place and nor could they be felt, even if they're mentioned at places. It's all like a stiff set of words that we're reading. You need to describe more so it feels more real.

○ Character Development :: 2.5 | 10

◍ You should add a character introduction chapter. You should describe the characters. There's literally no description about how a character is. So, I can't really say how well they're structured or described or grown throughout the story. Please work on these areas.

○ Reviewer's Note

◍ You need to work a lot, on the way you describe things and your writing style, nor to mention grammar and punctuation. Please work on them, and do not be demotivated by this marking, this is a mere review to help you improve. Please don't be offended or disheartened, rather use it as an opportunity to know and identify your mistakes and work on them and improve. I'm sure you'll write amazing books. Please work hard and practice them, especially these aspects. You'll be better and improve, you'll be a great author, don't worry. Just keep trying and don't give up, no matter how disheartened you feel. Also, my markings aren't generally high, they're low only, so I request, DO NOT be disheartened or demotivated at all! All the best!<3

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Total :: 27.5 | 80

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