✧ Reviewer :: Chaotic_Lals
✧ Reviewee :: philipblade
✧ Book :: In The Valley of a Thousand Footprints

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◖Basics :: 14.5 | 20◗

⚘ Cover :: 02 | 05

◍ The cover, to be honest, wasn't pleasing to the eyes. The effort you put into the typography can be appreciated. However, it didn't come out right. The underline under 'in the' & 'of a' was unnecessary. For both of the title in a whole, a bolder & more visible font would be best. As for the author's handle, if you could minus the highlight, it'd be good. The line-border at the bottom of the cover looks out of place too.

⚘ Synopsis :: 04 | 05

◍ It was detailed & to the point! Not too long, but not too short either. Contained almost everything a book's blurb is expected to have. However, I suggest you cut out the last part, after the book's synopsis. That is, the update, comments & likes part. You can create a separate chapter within the book to express yourself. In the book's synopsis, it's a tad bit off.

⚘ Title :: 4.5 | 05

◍ Apt & entrancing.

⚘ Execution :: 4.5 | 05

◍ Written & carried out beautifully! I believe the main reason the book is low on views is due to the unpleasant cover. Perhaps, ordering from a graphic shop could help. Moving on, there were errors in the grammar — which is elaborated later on, in this review. I suggest you get your book edited, either by yourself, or through an editor. There are several graphic & editing shops in Wattpad, including under this community's profile. Putting all of that aside, I really think you have the potential to get the book published somewhere!

○ Plot & Creativity :: 09 | 10

◍ To be frank, I have read books with similar plots previously. However, the way you've written it, made the book interesting. I'd give a plus for creativity too. No plot holes noticed just yet. The build-up hasn't come off as rushed either.

○ Writing Style :: 08 | 10

◍ Incredible! I really like your way with words. However, I must point out that at some points, your paragraphs got a bit out of hand & unnecessarily descriptive. It'd best if you avoid that happening, since it can decrease the interest & spike a reader has in your book.

◖Grammar & Vocabulary :: 14 | 20◗

⚘ Grammar :: 06 | 10

◍ Even though the grammar was appreciable, you did not use capital letters at the beginning of a new sentence. There were several other missing punctuations like commas, full stops, etc. The errors may be really small, but it really affects the quality of the book. Also, when a line — be it in a dialogue, or narration — is interrupted, you use an em dash (—), not a hyphen (-). Then, there were several places where you missed out on using a comma while switching from a dialogue to the tag usage. You got it right at some places, but wrong at most. For instance, in the first chapter, it's "Goddamnit, no Sackn," she said, facepalming. You forgot the comma.

⚘ Vocabulary :: 08 | 10

◍ There were more than a handful of typos that I noticed throughout the book. Again, I suggest you edit the book. Keeping them aside, you have an impressively vast vocabulary! I also wanted to point out that you don't use a period after 'Miss'. You only use the period when you use 'Ms.' or 'Mrs.'

○ Emotions Conveyed :: 08 | 10

◍ The emotions were conveyed exceptionally. Like I mentioned in under 'writing style', if you cut down on unnecessary details, it would've been better.

○ Character Development :: 09 | 10

◍ Upon reading the book, it was quite obvious that you've put your thought into your characters. Each of them have a separate spotlight & different branches. As for the development, I'm sure it'll take place gradually.

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Total :: 62.5 | 80

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