✧ Reviewer :: CoolWhenUrBatman
✧ Reviewee :: 0valeyes
✧ Book :: Are You Afraid Of The Dark? Ghost Tape

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◖Basics :: 08 | 20◗

⚘ Cover :: 01 | 05

◍ It's not something that would attract readers. I personally don't think hand drawn pictures are a good cover to have. I'd recommend using a graphic shop if you're unable to make your own graphics.

⚘ Synopsis :: 02 | 05

◍ Complete lack of punctuation. I had a hard time reading and understanding that. Please add some punctuation in there. It's very confusing, maybe it's because I don't know what fandom this is, but the synopsis should be in a way that someone from outside the fandom can understand it.

⚘ Title :: 03 | 05

◍ Nice and suits the book. Not overly creative, though.

⚘ Execution :: 02 | 05

◍ It can be improved, but It didn't leave a good impression on me.

○ Plot & Creativity :: 05 | 10

◍ To be frank, I have no idea what I read. I understand the general idea, but not the specifics. It didn't really have a plot.

○ Writing Style :: 05 | 10

◍ Not standard. Everything was mixed. Please look up writing styles and try applying them to your writing.

◖Grammar & Vocabulary :: 10 | 20◗

⚘ Grammar :: 05 | 10

◍ Complete lack of punctuation gave me a hard time reading and understanding. Wrong use of abbreviations (their instead of they're and so on).

When we're writing dialogues we do them like this:

"Hi," she said and waved, "How are you?"

You either add unnecessary spaces or forgo the commas. Please pay attention to these points. 

⚘ Vocabulary :: 05 | 10

◍ Very basic vocabulary and lots of repetition. Try using synonyms.

○ Emotions Conveyed :: 00 | 10

◍ No emotions were conveyed.

○ Character Development :: 00 | 10

◍ No characters or development.

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Total :: 28 | 80

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