Round 2 Results: Dark Fantasy
Thank you so much for participating in the awards. The entries all had something truly unique or special about them. However, there can only be one winner and just like a good steak, our judges must trim the fat.
Below, are the second round results for Dark Fantasy.
Good luck to those continuing and thank you for your efforts to those who didn't make it through.
Note: We know that these results are delayed and sincerely apologize. Atheina was having a lot of technical problems through no fault of her own.
Judged by AtheinaVismark
Books that didn't make it to the final round:
The Life of Sorrow by apagado
Character/s Introduction: 6/10
Genre Fit: 6/10
Grammar/Mechanics: 7/10
Details: 7/10
Total: 26/40
Notes: Everly is one of the funniest ones I've read about in the last few days, and the continuous mysterious appearances of Sorrow make it intriguing, but for now I really can't see the Fantasy element, except from the yes and no appearances of the God which still hasn't been officially introduced. There were some missing commas where some should have been periods, some misplaced action tags and very few spelling errors. An enjoyable read, even if a bit confusing.
The Kingmaker by YouCanCallMeCorn
Character/s Introduction: 8.5/10
Genre Fit: 3/10
Grammar/Mechanics: 8/10
Details: 9/10
Total: 28.5/40
Notes: You have a marvelous way of writing. Your characters are extremely elegant and well fleshed out. The plot too is compelling and your writing encourages the reader to continue. Found some grammar errors and an excessive repetition of: "Lips," more or less in the middle of chapter 1. There are a few missing words that should be needed so that the flow does not completely break while reading. Some passages too, where a bit too heavy to read. Unfortunately, I took points away because this book is officially a fanfiction with Dark Fantasy as its sub-genre. Even if it's an AU I still consider it a work of Fanfic.
Blood Over Honor by peoniesofthepeople
Character/s Introduction: 8/10
Genre Fit: 9/10
Grammar/Mechanics: 7.5/10
Details: 9/10
Total: 33.5/40
Notes: You've made my heart love for 1 chapter Phyllipa only to make me hate her at the end of chapter 4- ouch, ouch ouch ouch. The reactions between the girls and the angst the population has against Gradia is incredibly well-written. Taking out that I love your writing style, this book is great! I did find some extra punctuation here and there, some missing commas and comma overuse while reading. But the main problem, if we may call it that, is the sentence length. Many times, because of your writing style, the sentence becomes too heavy, and I advise to break it up a bit more to help the readers not lose track of what they're reading. I'll surely continue this book even after the award is over.
Heart on Fire by khionewrites
Character/s Introduction: 8/10
Genre Fit: 10/10
Grammar/Mechanics: 7/10
Details: 7/10
Total: 32/40
Notes: I absolutely hate her family XD, meaning each single sibling of hers. you wrote them very well- her sister is the one I hate more along with her mother. Naomi is extremely fragile when it comes to her lineage, a stunning portament of what I too believe is how nobles act. But my favorite character is without a double Sarah. There were a few things I noticed while reading, you write in the present, but there were times where you switched to the past and this made the writing a bit wobbly. Another small detail is that you started a sentence with I in the past chapter. In this case the repetition does not leave a nice effect. There were some cases of comma overuse and dash overuse, no spelling errors detected. Some questions without question marks and a small part in chapter 1 when she says: "My expectations," even if I think it's not hers but it's: "Their expectation." theirs, as in her family expecting many things from her.
The Fae Ambassador by philouwrites
Character/s Introduction: 7.5/10
Genre Fit: 10/10
Grammar/Mechanics:8/10
Details: 8/10
Total: 33.5/40
Notes: I really like the story and the ambassador is without a doubt my current favorite character. I surely will continue reading this story even after the award ends! Andromeda feels very human and extremely easy to relate to. The main problem I found while reading is the incorrect use of commas and at times of the: "..." I suggest looking at that closely as it appears to be ".." or "...." or even used when there is no need for them. No spelling mistakes detected.
The Elf Witch by jacquelyngilmore
Character/s Introduction: 8.5/10
Genre Fit: 10/10
Grammar/Mechanics: 7.5/10
Details: 8.5/10
Total: 34.5/40
Notes: I'll start by saying how much I love Imani, how she kept her chin high and never wavered in front of her daily struggles- her iron will is something that I personally find incredible. I do suggest looking at the punctuation again. There was a lot of excessive comma usage throughout the book, don't be afraid to use periods, I was/still am the same so I know the struggle. Found some grammar errors here and there but nothing too grave that can't be easily corrected.
Books Going to the Final Round:
Whisper of Blade by MiyaHikari
Character/s Introduction: 9/10
Genre Fit: 10/10
Grammar/Mechanics: 9/10
Details: 9/10
Total: 37/40
Notes: A compelling read from chapter 1, taking out the prologue. Minerva, Min, or the Pale viper is a strong and at the same time, an extremely fragile character which I loved reading about. Your writing is not too hard to read and not too difficult to understand, the perfect combination for a book. The ending where we meet the cat with nine-tails and after the Hydro Prince was probably my favorite part. Another thing I love is how you decided to rename the days of the week, a very sly thing that I personally enjoyed a lot in terms of worldbuilding.
The Great Ellini by obliviablack
Character/s Introduction: 9.5/10
Genre Fit: 9/10
Grammar/Mechanics: 9.5/10
Details: 9.5/10
Total: 37.5/40
Notes: Probably one of the best prose I've seen on wattpad in years. You don't give too much information when writing and the result comes off extremely clean. Ellini is currently my favorite character, the way you've written her is simply sublime. I've found very few comma overuse and one or two where a comma was lacking while reading and the only real thing I would change is enclosing Ellini's ability Helen of Troy in apostrophes such as. 'Helen of Troy'.
Blood of the Sin by AliKatMeow
Character/s Introduction: 9.25/10 Genre Fit: 10/10
Grammar/Mechanics: 9/10
Details: 7.5/10
Total: 35.75/40
Notes: Great start. The reader can already start feeling the mystery behind the murders and I myself still have no idea on who the heck could be. I've been absolutely loving the interactions between Sebastian and Castor especially when we first met the latter. I've seen some grammatical issues, but not too many, no spelling mistakes and no comma overuse which is great. I would suggest looking a bit more into the details/descriptions added, for you tend to focus a lot on the characters and not on the scenario playing around them.
The Silvertree by WrenMorgan
Character/s Introduction: 9/10
Genre Fit: 10/10
Grammar/Mechanics: 8/10
Details: 9/10
Total: 36/40
Notes: I absolutely LOVE the start of your chapters, each filled with a spark of history. You've woven the details and elements of the past in a magnificent way that I'm in awe of your skills. The only thing that I really suggest is look at the commas, I found many missing throughout the chapters. No spelling errors, there were some punctuation errors but not really many.
Black Avatare by SuVida777 Character/s Introduction: 7.5/10
Genre Fit: 10/10
Grammar/Mechanics: 8/10
Details: 9.5/10
Total: 35/40
Notes: Binara is set to face an uncountable number of dangers, everything around her screams danger, and the people who should believe her do not even remotely think that her words hold the power of truth. A thrilling read, even if I do admit that the setting was a bit confusing, many terms come off as new as this is a folklore tale from Sri Lanka. Maybe throw in some more explanations when it comes to local things that many, outside from this place, such as myself, probably do not know. Found some missing commas and some commas where I would have personally changed to period to not make the sentence too heavy, and long. A suggestion would be in chapter 4; change a wave of mutters into a wave of murmurs - mutters sounds a bit of when talking about a crowd.
Once again, congratulations to all who made it to the third round!
Good luck as you progress!
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