A tribute follow to Fantasyforlife20 who wrote this

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JUDGE: JHLeewriter

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PARTICIPANT: storymov

FROM: India (Asia)

BOOK: The Time Mirror

TOTAL: 69/100

Title: 9/10

Opening: 7/10

Characters: 13/20

Plot: 24/40

Grammar: 16/20

Title: The title evokes interest in the reader. It also reflected well what the story was about.

Opening: The opening was impactful, with a quote, but the first sentence lacked punctuation that ruined the impression of the story.

Characters: Although the characterization was rather direct and efficient, their dialogue was unnatural. There could have been more detailed description of their moment-to-moment emotions.

Plot: It was a good choice to utilize different POVs, but each chapter was ore like a diary entry, which made the flow of the story rather choppy. It was more so because the entire book sounded like a dramatic monologue. However, the plot had a strong structure and form.

Grammar: There are unnatural parts in writing that does not meet grammatical rules, which broke my concentration. Some sentences were unnatural and not fitting the circumstances, though they were grammatically correct.

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PARTICIPANT: PotterSwift013

FROM: Asia

BOOK: A Sparkling Mist

TOTAL: 79/100

Title: 8/10

Opening: 6/10

Characters: 17/20

Plot: 30/40

Grammar: 18/20

Title: The title is unique, and arose in the reader's curiosity about the contents of the story.

Opening: The sudden change in tenses didn't give off the best impression, though the intentions were understandable. Perhaps try a different font, or set the story up as a diary entry.

Characters: Change between POVs was short-each pov lasted for two paragraphs sometimes-but this was enough, or perhaps even more effective, in showing characterization by allowing the reader to contrast each character in their head. Creative idea.

Plot: The sudden change of tenses right from the beginning was awkward and unexpected. However, it didn't affect the plot too much. Including the Author's POV was a great idea, but personally, I feel that it could have been done more naturally.

Grammar: The sentences were fairly simple and sentences not complicated. Hardly any grammatical errors.

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PARTICIPANT: FeministWitch_13

FROM: Asia

BOOK: The Other World

TOTAL: 91/100

Title: 9/10

Opening: 10/10

Characters: 17/20

Plot: 37/40

Grammar: 18/20

Title: The title expresses well the fictitious nature of the story and corresponds with the overall plot.

Opening: The opening quote was meaningful and memorable. The opening sentence gave off enough information about the main character to hook the reader.

Characters: The character's voices were clear and easy to follow. Some of the dialogue was humorous and thus highly realistic.

Plot: The plot was well-organized and the idea of each chapter easily comprehendible.

Grammar: Thought not without mistakes, the grammar and punctuation through the story was accurate. The language was simple yet clear and creative.

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PARTICIPANT: booklored

FROM: Asia

BOOK: Amethyst 1. Inception

TOTAL: 92/100

Title: 9/10

Opening: 8/10

Characters: 18/20

Plot: 37/40

Grammar: 20/20

Title: The title was appropriate to the story and magical, thus matching the

Opening: The opening was not entirely creative-in media res in the form of a description. But language in the first paragraph was well put.

Characters: The descriptions used to speak about characters' physical/ psychological traits were rounded up well in meaningful words and provoked thought and made them multi-faceted.

Plot: The plot had good pace, and even descriptive paragraphs had movement. Dialogue was not overused. Good overall.

Grammar: There were hardly any grammatical mistakes. In addition, the syntax was used very well.

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PARTICIPANT: devilsupro

FROM: Asia

BOOK: The Psychopath

TOTAL: 77/100

Title: 8/10

Opening: 6/10

Characters: 16/20

Plot: 30/40

Grammar: 17/20

Title: Although the title itself is not creative in itself, it is a powerful one that reveals the main key feature of the story effectively.

Opening: The opening of the first chapter was above average, but the existing preface lowered the tension of the story. It would have been better to write an author's note instead.

Characters: The characters' past and present emotions and tribulations were expressed clearly through long dialogue, which was not entirely comfortable to read but understandable considering the nature of the genre written.

Plot: The plot had a good structure and was easy to follow. However, nearly all progress was made through dialogue, question and answers and reactions to characters' comments, which got boring after a few chapters.

Grammar: There were very few grammatical mistakes, and the sentences flowed smoothly though not entirely without mistakes.

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JUDGE: Healer9999

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PARTICIPANT: stupidthatfolks

FROM: Asia

BOOK: Acquaintance

TOTAL: 79/100

Title: 9/10

Opening: 7/10

Characters: 18/20

Plot: 32/40

Grammar: 13/20

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PARTICIPANT: NerissaTheodora

FROM: Asia

BOOK: Adam's Ale

TOTAL: 94/100

Title: 10/10

Opening: 9/10

Characters: 19/20

Plot: 38/40

Grammar: 18/20

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PARTICIPANT: Seros_Sterling

FROM: --

BOOK: The Tale of Shadow and Light, Book 1 : A Grand Obscura

TOTAL: 93/100

Title: 8/10

Opening: 9/10

Characters: 18/20

Plot: 39/40

Grammar: 19/20

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PARTICIPANT: sunshineglitch

FROM: --

BOOK: No Room for Macabre

TOTAL: 91/100

Title: 8/10

Opening: 9/10

Characters: 17/20

Plot: 38/40

Grammar: 19/20

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PARTICIPANT: e-z-22

FROM: --

BOOK: Song of Deception

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JUDGE: Alaina1705

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PARTICIPANT: XoXDQXoX

FROM: Australia

BOOK: Awoken

TOTAL: 89.5/100

Title: 8/10

Opening: 7/10
Characters: 16.5/20

Plot: 38/40

Grammar: 20/20

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PARTICIPANT: SarahFullerton9

FROM: USA
BOOK: The Way Out

TOTAL: 88/10

Title: 8/10

Opening: 7/10

Characters: 18/20

Plot: 36/40

Grammar: 19/20

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PARTICIPANT: schma10

FROM: USA

BOOK: Aquarius

TOTAL: 89/100

Title: 7/10

Opening: 7/10

Characters: 19/20

Plot: 37/40

Grammar: 19/20

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PARTICIPANT: DeBigLila

FROM: Africa

BOOK: Kwami

TOTAL: 90/100

Title: 8/10

Opening: 8/10

Characters: 18/20

Plot: 38/40

Grammar: 18/20

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PARTICIPANT: LillianHoffer

FROM: USA
BOOK: Reveille

TOTAL: 95/100

Title: 8/10

Opening: 9/10

Characters: 19/20

Plot: 39/40

Grammar: 20/20

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Judge: Unknown_savage
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PARTICIPANT: ArthNAkaysh

FROM: North America

BOOK: The Raven ritual

SCORE: 89/100

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PARTICIPANT: divinedices

FROM: Asia

BOOK: The storyteller

SCORE: 98/100

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PARTICIPANT: BrutalRice

FROM: Asia

BOOK: The lady in the weeping mansion

SCORE: 91/100

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PARTICIPANT: Ouryoaie

FROM: Africa

BOOK: Calcifer

SCORE: 96/100

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PARTICIPANT: Serberus580

FROM:

BOOK: Immortal: Wolves had risen

SCORE: 97/100

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