LOOK AT ME I'M A FUCKING THESOROUS!!
That's prob not how you spell thesorous but whatever.
Now what bugs me is when I see this
Her eyes were a luminous red, as she raced through the scarlet trees.
(Name)'s blood colored coat was ripped and torn.
YOU DON'T HAVE TO USE EVERY WORD IN THE FUCKING DICTIONARY THAT TRANSLATES TO RED!!!
FUCKING WRITE YOUR STORY, YOU DON'T NEED TO BE A HUMAN THESAURUS!!!
LIKE
RED IS FINE
USE IT
BUT DON'T USE IT CONSTANTLY EITHER THAT JUST DOESN'T TRANSLATE WELL.
Revise your sentence so it's more like this...
Her eyes were a luminous red, as she raced through the scarlet trees.
(Name)'s dark red coat was ripped and torn.
See, see how much BETTER that sounds???
And you DON'T have the stress of having to cram a fucking dictionary into your chapters?????
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