1. Wildest Dreams by Ablazed_phoenix

Total: 84.5/100

Review: While the title is unique, it doesn’t fully reflect the book’s plot. Given the depth of the story, a more thoughtful title might have been more fitting. The cover features only Shubman, even though the story is about Shubsara. While it's visually appealing, it doesn't represent the story accurately. The blurb does a great job of capturing attention. Both scenarios presented are highly intriguing and likely to draw readers in. The grammar, vocabulary, and transitions are flawless. There wasn’t a single mistake throughout the book, not even in punctuation. The story balances humor, romance, and emotions well. Every element, whether it was annoyance or cuteness, was explored in just the right amount. The dialogue feels natural and well-paced, making the character interactions believable and engaging.
The character development, especially for an enemies-to-lovers trope, was strong and well-executed. However, there may have been room for a bit more depth in their growth. The plot follows a familiar path and has some clichés, but the way the story unfolds keeps it interesting and engaging. The story was so enjoyable that I ended up reading the entire book instead of just a few chapters, which speaks to how captivating it was overall.

Wildest Dreams by Ablazed_phoenix offers a well-written and engaging story with a strong balance of humor, romance, and character interactions. While the title and cover could have been more reflective of the plot, the story itself manages to hold the reader’s attention through its natural dialogue and polished grammar. The blurb is a standout feature, drawing readers in with intriguing scenarios, and the overall writing style effectively delivers the essence of the characters and their journey. Though the plot may tread familiar ground with its enemies-to-lovers theme, the execution keeps it fresh and enjoyable. Character development was solid, especially for the trope, but there may have been room for a bit more depth. Ultimately, the book was highly enjoyable and delivered a satisfying reading experience. The book leaves a lasting impression with its engaging narrative, even if there are small areas for improvement. A recommended read for those who enjoy romantic stories with a touch of humor and emotional depth.

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2. Endings Aren't Always Happy by shifa2298

Total: 79/100

Review: The title clearly reflects the book’s plot and has a unique touch. The cover shows only Shubman, even though the story is about Shubsara. Shubman's aggressive stance might hint at his inner struggles, but the cover doesn’t fully match the book’s theme.
The book lacks a blurb, only providing a trigger warning and disclaimer. This leaves readers without any information about the story’s plot. The grammar is slightly above average but has several issues with mistakes in grammar, phrasing, tense, and punctuation, which affect readability. The writing combines romance and emotional depth well, but grammar issues and rough transitions between flashbacks and present events impact the overall flow. The dialogue is natural and well-paced, making the characters' interactions believable.
Character development is a strong point, especially the way Shubman’s character evolves and how Sachin Tendulkar’s role is integrated smoothly.
The plot is unique and engaging, offering a fresh and compelling storyline. Even though there are some issues with pacing and grammar, the interesting plot and twists kept me engaged and made the reading experience enjoyable.

"Endings Aren't Always Happy" by shifa2298 offers a unique and captivating plot with strong character development. While the title and storyline are engaging, the lack of a blurb and some issues with grammar and cover design detract from the overall experience. Despite these shortcomings, the book provides an enjoyable read with natural dialogue and an intriguing plot.

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3. Shubsara One Shots by nimmo77

Total: 70.5/100

The title is relevant to the content but could benefit from a more creative or unique touch to make it stand out and grab attention. The cover fits the theme of the book, but there’s room for more creativity to make it visually engaging and appealing to potential readers.
While the blurb introduces the book, it doesn't reflect the key focus on post-marriage one-shots, which might miss an opportunity to attract readers looking for those types of stories. A clearer mention of this theme could make it more enticing. There were a few minor grammatical mistakes, but overall, the writing flowed smoothly and didn’t distract from the reading experience. The author's strength lies in smut, but there were glimpses of emotional depth in certain one-shots that truly stood out. There’s clear potential here to explore more complex emotional scenes, which wasn’t fully utilized in this collection. The dialogue felt natural and well-paced throughout, making the interactions between characters believable and smooth. In the smut-heavy one-shots, the emotional and relational depth of the characters wasn’t as strong. However, the later stories, particularly those involving family, offered much more development and emotional connection, which was a pleasant surprise. The plots were well thought out and unique. Each one-shot had its own distinct feel, keeping the reader intrigued with fresh scenarios.
While the smut content was central to many chapters, a bit more balance with themes like mutual support, care, and shared responsibilities in a marital setting would have kept me more engaged. The first half was less captivating for me due to the repetitive focus, but the emotional depth in later chapters improved my enjoyment.

The book was really good at certain points it made me laugh and even got me emotional. Overall, it showcases a strong foundation in smut writing with glimpses of emotional depth in certain one-shots. While the title and cover are relevant, there's room for more creativity to make the book stand out. The author demonstrates solid grammar and dialogue skills, though the character development and relational depth could be explored further, especially in stories centered around marital life. The plots are unique and engaging, but a more balanced approach between intimacy and emotional connection could enhance the overall experience. For readers seeking smut, this book will likely hit the mark, but for those looking for more emotional layers, there is potential for further development.

4. Atrangi Pyaar with ICT Parivar by  _Fictionaluniverse_

Total score: 70/100

Review: The title has a unique, catchy ring to it, especially with the rhyming. It fits well with the theme of including the entire ICT family. The cover is creative and visually appealing, perfectly capturing the essence of all the main characters in the story. The blurb shows effort but feels too lengthy and drawn out, missing the mark in terms of what a blurb is meant to achieve—concise and to the point. While the book is primarily in Hindi, the English parts contain multiple errors, which impacts the overall reading experience. Though the plot and creativity are impressive, the writing style falls short. It doesn’t manage to keep the reader engaged, making it feel more suited to a quick read rather than something to get immersed in. The dialogue occasionally works well with the book's tone, but most of the time it feels unnatural, breaking the flow of the story. While the characters go through emotional transitions, it doesn't always feel cohesive or fully developed. There’s room for improvement in making the characters’ growth more believable. The plot is strong and interesting, with plenty of potential for development. However, it could be executed more effectively. The plot and scenes have potential, but the writing style and unnatural dialogue detract from the overall enjoyment. It feels like the flow of the story is often interrupted, making it hard to stay fully invested.

Review: The story has a unique title and a great cover that perfectly captures the characters. The plot is interesting and has potential, but the writing style and dialogue need improvement to make the story flow more naturally. While there are some strong points, such as creativity and character transitions, the overall enjoyment is impacted by the writing style and grammar errors. With some adjustments, the story could become more engaging and easier to connect with.

1. Rewrite the stars by notajoke77

Total: 89/100

Review: "And everyone loved a good story." The last line said. This was the good story no one could ever hate. Once you dive into it, there is no going back. It was not perfect. Just like real life. No one was perfect here and those imperfections are the reason they were special. The readers could never hate any character no matter how wrong they went. There was a tinge of sympathy for everyone of them. Be it from sacrificing your feelings for the other's happiness to ditching the girl you were supposed to marry on the wedding day. You could feel what the characters are feeling, you laugh with them, you cry with them and this is what makes you know how good the writing is. The characters in the past acted like how they should, adolescents, with fluctuating hormones, not really knowing how they should actually act. That's what made it real.
But the ending, as fictional as it could get. Real lives don't give you the chances to rewrite the stars. It gave them. Much needed. Real life could get worse and worst and what could keep you sane are these fictional happiness.
Without any doubt, this is one of the best ICT fictions out there.

2. Love whispers by IctXkkr

Total: 79/100

Review: Although the plot of female lead being Rohit's sister is repetitive, the humour and Srisha's bond with other characters, especially Ishan, made it a good read.
The side characters are crucial for the story which is shown very well here (special mention: Virat bhai)
The main couple has a healthy relationship in terms of communication and they talk everything out is a plus point.
Also, the story failed to maintain a steady pace. It's nice that the story isn't dragged too much but everything was so fast forward.
The grammar in the story part could've been better. It became confusing a few times.
Overall, I enjoyed reading it and had a good laugh.

3. Hearts entwined by loveeict

Total: 80/100

Review : The plot of the female lead being Rohit's sister isn't new. Nor is a group of ICT kids being best friends and one of them suddenly being the object of jealousy for the male lead.
The pace is good, exploring their feelings, getting confused over that sudden emotion. Neither it is dragged too much nor fast forwarded like that. Keeping it the way it should be.
The chaos could've been more chaotic. An ICT story without 'that' level of chaos seems incomplete if there are all the characters present. Half of the characters shown in aesthetics part, which made the readers come here, haven't been introduced yet and this could disinterest the readers.
Till now, it is quite funny and hopefully will be more humorous in the upcoming chapters. Overall a good read if you want to have a laugh.

1. Go, Die & Come Back by MustafaAsad6

Total: 85/100

Review: Let’s take it from the top. First things first: the title. From the get-go, it gives the impression of a thriller, and is rather interesting. A personal note would be to use the word ‘and’ instead of an ampersand. Next thing is the cover. It fits the title and genre quite well, portraying the multiple factions in the story. I have no comments. Moving on to the blurb. Note that this section is my first impression before reading the book. The blurb is good, it gives you the right amount of information about the plot without giving away too much of it. However, the reason I deducted points were two things: first of all, the impression given through the tone of writing is softer than would be expected of a thriller. So, unless that was your intention, you should work on that. The second reason is the fact it’s slightly blocky and feels somewhat like an infodump of all the factions and crimes. My notes are: paragraph spacing, stronger language, shorter sentences, and less information on the world with more suspense.

The next point is the hook/prologue. It personally didn’t hook me that much - the first sentence isn’t that impactful; however, the atmosphere is interesting. No catch rears its head before the end of the prologue, which is a cliffhanger.
It has potential and is interesting, but could’ve been executed better. For
example, you could describe Rachel’s attitude more as she talks about her
son having been killed. Did she seem sinister? Did she seem sad? Was she
nonchalant? What was her attitude?

Next point is grammar. Punctuation has no recurring issues that I can note.
The main issue with grammar was the occasional weird use of words - some
of them didn’t quite fit their intended meaning and/or made the prose choppy and hard to engage with. No other problems.

Next - writing style. Your writing is quite descriptive, and each idea comes
across quite well. It’s engaging without being overly confusing, yet
suspenseful enough to keep one on their toes. Different scenes blend well into
each other. However, there are a few things that I need to note. My first note is that you need to work on paragraph spacing. Longer paragraphs can really be disengaging and confusing to some readers. My second note is ‘show, don’t
tell’. It seems to be a weakness in your writing - you tend to tell the reader how a character is feeling instead of showing it through actions, body language,
and vivid descriptions. Dialogue delivery. Something that’s incredibly important when writing
characters is distinguishing how different ages and personalities would carry their speech and what ‘inner voice’ they’d have. I find that this specific aspect is a little lacking in your writing. It’s as though a young child speaks the same way his adult father does - this, in its entirety, takes away from personification of characters and from their separate worlds. Remember, dialogue is also under the ‘show, don’t tell’ umbrella. For character development, I fear I'm not doing it due justice since I didn’t venture very far into the book.

However, from the initial chapters, each character’s personality is set in stone. They’re all distinct with different
tendencies, and you portrayed Brandon’s fall from grace quite well, from his psychotic tendencies as a child to the love his father never gave him. The different facets of the human mind are all interesting to bear, and even more fun to play around with. Diverse morality, hidden motives, the way different events can psychologically affect a character - it’s all portrayed amazingly. Great work!

Plot is well-crafted with many plot twists that give it the feel of the thriller it’s supposed to be. It keeps the reader on their toes, having them wanting for
more. I loved the fact that not everyone is clueless and that no one could be
trusted - it’ll be a great read, for sure! Kudos.Overall, the deduction was due to the blocky writing in some parts. With some editing here and there and small changes implemented, it will surely make for an exciting read, a rabbit hole that people fall into. In a good way.

2. The Gathering Dark by Aravis-Brightspell

Total: 95/100

Review: The title is fitting and very interesting. Good work. The cover complements the title quite well. However, I think your username and title positions could be switched. If not, then you could change the font in your username since it draws attention away from the title too much or make it smaller.

The blurb, for my initial impression, is very intriguing. However, I think it can
use more haunting/paranormal descriptions to draw in the reader. For now, it’s more on the mild-mannered side. Otherwise, very good!

Moving on to the hook, AKA the 1st chapter. A very strong start you have
there! You could do with describing the mansion more vividly before showing
Jessica’s apprehensions on it. The rest of the chapter steadily reels in the
reader with immersive writing and a small history lesson, flowing well and
interweaving small details one after the other in a way that doesn’t feel any bit
like an infodump.

Your writing style is really enchanting and had me by the throat. You pace
events in a way that’s neither too fast nor too slow, introducing the details that matter and captivating the reader. Your paragraph spacing is just right, with poetic prose that paints a vivid image in the reader’s mind. The descriptions are genuinely chilling and terrifying. I love Jessica so much! XD She’s such a relatable character. Her inner monologue adds a comedic touch to the story, making it even better. She’s daring, too, and it gives her character even more flavour. More than that,
Claude's character is so mysterious yet intriguing. Besides the obvious mystery of his past, his tendencies as a person and his beliefs and habits are something one needs to read between the lines to fully grasp. And the way you portrayed them all, even Azriel's villainous nature that sprouted from his being a demon, was all so well-done. I wonder how their relationships will continue to grow, and what other characters will join our little cast.

Overall, this was such a beautiful and fun read. From the prose to the plot and how everything is woven together, it was probably my favourite out of this batch. Keep writing!!

3. THE BLOOD BATH ! by  RedRoseFicz

Total: 48/100

Review: The title isn’t bad per se, especially given the subtitle on the cover. However, it
ties in no way to the blurb, and the title in and of itself could be changed to
better grip the reader. At the very least, consider removing the exclamation
point.

Now, the blurb really… needs a lot of work. First of all, you’re telling, not
showing. I appreciate the elements that you’re incorporating into the story, and
they would’ve been far more impactful had you shown these elements in
action instead of simply telling that they’re there. Another note is revealing the plot instead of letting it unfold in front of the reader’s eyes through your writing. And, in the end, you spoke a whole lot without giving any sort of information on what to expect from the story. What are the supernatural elements involved? What is Y/N’s relationship with the group? What sort of drama is involved, what is the plot incorporating, what are the characters’ views and experiences? It sounds more like a review than a description. Consider throwing in a specific scene, highlighting the event that leads to the ascension towards the climax, portraying some sort of inner monologue, or at the very least providing a tagline. That way, the reader can be hooked into clicking to
read further. The most vital aspect of a blurb is drawing in the reader with
enough intrigue without giving away the story, especially if it’s a thriller. In my opinion, the blurb has a lot of potential, but lacks the correct elements to draw in potential readers.

The next point of interest is the hook of the story itself. The first line is good,
but then it falls short on the first paragraph. It describes the mundane aspects of life after an important event, and introduces the characters to the reader. There are a few things I’d like to note here: first, the character introductions. Given that this is a BTS fanfic, the introduction is appreciated since I am not familiar with the group. However, a way you could’ve gone about it was showing what they were doing instead of simply telling. For example, instead of saying that Jin was tinkering with the guitar, you could describe the sound
of guitar strings being pulled as the others hear it. You could then slide in the loud noise of video games and the grunts and yells that come with playing
them and how they clash with the guitar notes. Show, don’t tell. Describe the
atmosphere, don’t tell me what everyone is doing. The second note is the action in the later part of the chapter. It begins throwing in questions, such as,
“Why is an idol group investigating supernatural happenings?” Unfortunately, there’s no follow-up in the first chapter at least. Then we are suddenly thrown into a fight scene with no rhyme or reason - the issue here is the pacing. One minute they’re an idol group rest, the next they’re investigating a haunted mansion, then suddenly they’re fighting some malevolent monster.

In all of these, the description and lead-up fall short. What’s the monster like? What’s the place like? Lots of questions, and not the good kind, unfortunately.Now, your grammar is perhaps the strongest point of this book. I’ve seen no issues thus far. However, your writing style needs some work. Some of the descriptions are really good, and you have a decent vocabulary under your belt. However, things fall short when it truly comes to action, which is the whole point of this book. As a thriller, things should have a more suspenseful atmosphere, more chilling descriptions, and one really needs to flesh out the stakes that the characters are going against. In the end, what’s the point of the story? What are you, as an author, trying to convey with these characters and events? There doesn’t always have to be a message, but every action has a reaction. Everything is a cycle of cause and consequence, and nothing matters more than a character’s motives for doing something. The pacing is rather weak, throwing the events at the reader instead of steadily leading up to them, and the introductory subtitles at each point of a chapter could easily be incorporated into the writing. Instead of telling the reader that this is the climax, you should smoothly transition while showing the stakes. More vivid
descriptions help keep the reader hooked, and the same goes for portraying various characters’ feelings.

While reading, it really felt as though I was watching an old film reel with no real portrayal of the characters’ distinct feelings and views, so nothing set them apart from one another. They felt like
talking blocks of cardboard - that is another weakness in your writing.
On the topic of characters, dialogue delivery and character development are the next point to delve into. As aforementioned, the characters didn’t feel like they had any substance - there was the seemingly responsible leader and… everyone else. Y/N, who’s supposed to be the protagonist, is barely even mentioned in the events. There is no substance to their character, and their actions seem to be more of a ‘remembered last-minute’ sort of writing. They don’t have the qualifications the rest of the group (seemingly) do, making them stand more as a background character instead of a protagonist. Now, the dialogue delivery. Nothing is hard to understand, but there is zero distinction in
character voice. They all sound monotonous and the same, making them blur into one another with no personality to give to their name. Thus, it’s hard to remember who is who. Even if this is a fanfiction, it stands to reason to at least give a feel for their individual personalities.

Furthermore, there is nothing to go
on for their individual relationships. It was mentioned in the blurb that there’s
drama and strong feelings involved, but it doesn’t seem like things are steadily
developed and given their right to blossom into different dynamics. The story seems to be a static show of events unfolding, once again, with zero
emotional impact involved. It barely even feels like a thriller.

Now, plot. Your plot has potential. It really can be made into a good thriller.
However, the worldbuilding is heavily lacking, and it falls short on plot twists
and intricacies of character dynamics due to the lacking writing. Do revise my other notes.

Overall, the story certainly receives the honour of trying. There’s potential that
can be seen with practice, since I’m assuming you're a new writer. I apologise if this review came off as harsh in any way, I only mean to provide constructive criticism. Keep writing, even if you don’t write well. Everyone has to start out somewhere, and the only way to climb the ladder is to keep going.

4. The Saga of Mafioso by JohanLiebert33

Total: 73/100

Review: First, the title. It feels more… adventure-y somehow? It’s not bad at all, but I don’t think it gives the right vibe for this genre. The cover is very well-done, though. Now, for the blurb, I think it’s pretty neat. There’s a fair amount of intrigue involved without giving away the story, and it introduces the premise well enough. I deducted points for two things—first of all, the use, or rather lack thereof, of the em dash. This one right here (—). I know it’s not available if you’re typing from your phone, so in that case, please put a space between the dash and the words on either side. It’s a personal pet peeve, really. On that note, the word ‘who’s’ should’ve been ‘whose’. Who’s means who is or who has. Whose is the possessive form. Also, ‘villainess’. That means female villain. The word you were probably looking for is villainy. The second reason Ideducted points is the last paragraph. Telling the reader what they’ll find is never as impactful as showing them with vivid descriptions. Show what the mafia do, describe their actions, give us a snippet of that reality you wish to portray.

Moving on, the hook. The first sentence is very weak. This specific part can
make or break a book—suggestions would be starting with Paula’s question, or by describing Lester’s apprehensions and his demeanour. The rest of the
prologue was good, though it was impeded by grammatical and pacing issues. Your grammar needs quite some work. There are many punctuation errors, especially with dialogue, as well as tenses and pronouns and missing
commas. I suggest hiring an editor or using a grammar checker. Quillbot is a
good option (avoid Grammarly at all costs!!), but make sure whatever checker you use doesn’t ruin your prose. Your writing is okay. Some parts are described very well, but others really need a bunch of work. The main issues are pacing and telling instead of
showing. Events appear as though they’re flung at the reader instead of
smoothly transitioning between them. Character’s feelings aren’t always
portrayed that vividly, and you tend to say, “and so … happened” instead of
showing the actual thing happening. There have been multiple instances of
this. Be careful.

The dialogue delivery isn’t very bad, but it’s more… mediocre? A lot of the
time, each character has their own voice. But equally as much, they tend to sound like lifeless robots, stating intention and declaring actions. Try to avoid that. Character motives all seem well, and everything happens for a reason. Good job. The plot has a lot of potential, and was gripping thus far.

Overall, the reading experience was impeded by the aforementioned issues,
but otherwise, it’s all good. With some fine-tuning, this can truly be an amazing
story.

5. Masked Man by HJ_Fiction 

Total: 24/100

Review: There is… so much to say about this one. Whew, alright, let’s dive into it. The title isn’t very interesting. Even if it ties to the plot, it’s not what one would see and think, ‘I should read this.’ The funky spacing also ruins the experience a fair bit. The cover is alright, but I have to note that it feels a little… cluttered. And it doesn’t really match the title. Now the blurb… is lacking in so, so many ways. Zero description, zero intrigue, zero insight into characters, and zero insight into plot points. It
doesn’t even feel like a thriller, and it simply throws at the reader that yeah this has this and that. Reader then wonders, how do those things tie together? What’s the catch? But there’s nothing to fall back on. It simply gives off that typical murder mystery trope. I suggest refraining from throwing information at the reader, and including deeper descriptions in the blurb. An interesting quote or a teaser of an event happening without giving away or spoiling the story can also help a lot. What’s the case that led them to Busan? What sort of ‘love’ is in there? What are the crimes like? So many things you could add to grab the reader’s attention.

The writing style and grammar are heavily tied in this one. To begin with,
there’s barely any writing style to account for. You simply tell the reader that this is the setting, this person is doing that, and this scene goes like this. It looks more like a brainstorming outline than a written story. The dialogue style shifts between a script and actual dialogue, and in both cases, the grammar and punctuation are heavily in need of revision. I suggest hiring an editor and reading more published novels to fine-tune this one. As for writing style, simply throwing the information will not work. Time after time, the reader will, never feel engaged with the story, and the characters and places will never come to life. The excessive use of images can eventually be replaced by descriptions. Overall, reading more and attempting to write as published authors do is the only way to improve on this. Now, the dialogue was fairly straightforward, but it was also all over the place. It was hard to keep track of what the scene is like and what’s happening. Writing emotions in parentheses after the actual dialogue is not a way to remedy this. You have to use dialogue tags and mix action and speaking, as well as describe individual characters. The plot may have potential, but the virtually unreadable and confusing writing made it impossible to connect the dots and keep up with what was happening, thus making it unenjoyable. I apologise for the rather harsh rating, but unfortunately it is not unjustified. Writing is a journey, and to succeed and write a good story, you first have to try. You get the honour of making an attempt and taking the first step towards improvement. With time, I believe you will blossom into an amazing author.

1. "His Violent Delight" by Sserpensssortia 

Total: 63/100

Review: I believe the plot is creative—with a slight twist to the usual ‘Time Travel’ stories. However, the writing style could be better. There are a few particular phrases that are unsuitable to the corresponding paragraph. For example:

“.....my green eyes seemed to glisten due to the green and gray sky….” is a rather odd sentence as the chapter is in first person. The narrator couldn't possibly know whether her eyes were glistening or not.

Another noticeable mark is the lack of emotion. The parts that were meant to be either emotional or traumatising could have been made to sound less like a documentary and more realistic. For example:

“1943,” Dumbledore pronounced gently.

“You may not believe me, sir, but I somehow must have travelled through time….”

Here, the protagonist seems to accept too quickly that she has travelled through time which sounds rather odd.

Overall, this story has a lot of potential to be one of the best Harry Potter fanfictions. I wish the author good luck with their writing.

2."Grim" by ShortyWolf20

Total: 76/100

Review: A very well-written story, indeed. Zenith’s frustration and insecurity is well-portrayed as is Cressida’s maturity. However, the details of the scenes and the dialogue delivery was lacking at some points.

But, at the same time, it is extremely enjoyable and does pull the reader deep into it until they are left with no choice but to finish the story. Great job and good luck to the author!

3."The ghosts of the past" by Marmonomia264 

Total: 66/100

Review: A good prequel to the Harry Potter series is always refreshing. This one, in particular, is fun to read and easy to picture in the head. However, it lacks a certain smooth flow between scenes and dialogues. And a few odd quips in places where they are not suited.

Other than that, this story is a fine read. Hearty wishes to the author!

4."Who is Elena Taylor?" by clace_hinny777

Total: 69/100

Review: Let me just say first that this is a very unique plotline. However, the background is not very well-explained. There are gaps and slight plotholes in the details. Other than that, it is very very good indeed. Elena’s PTSD and insecurity is very well-portrayed and relatable and forces the reader to go on until the end.

Great job, author, and good luck!