Now, before we proceed to the critique, we need to get the pairings settled, first.

PAIRINGS 

Sayurime's "Error" → rosiewrites_' "Photobombed"

lilyanna4569's "The Story of Us" → SkyStormer_'s "Broken"

tehpiano's "Hidden Within" → TheDerpyUnicornGamez' "Trust..." → KittyKawaiiFT's "Ships React to Ships!" → [loop]

AKAMagicKitty's "Their New Leader" → JustAnotherDream_15's "How You Left Me"

_camiisme_'s "He Changed Me" → -invisiboo's "Falling, Hard"

Katelyn4eva16's "Insanity" → Toolouseave's "Mystreet/PDH one shots"

NOTE: Please message us if you don't see any critique on said book by the end of the week.

Now, onto the critique!

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Today, we'll be critiquing aphmaufan_shipper's "Katelyn's life"

  ➵ c o v e r

The cover isn't that bad, but I would recommend making an original cover, like adding text, not just taking a picture you like from the internet, saving it, and making it a cover for your book.

No, that's not how covers work.

➵ b l u r b / d e s c r i p t i o n

"kately has a rough life with parent who don't really love each other anymore. They fight ever day and she sometimes cries. She tries to protect her brothers. She had never fall in love. But one day she meets a boy name Travis and ever thing starts to change.  

Will k atelyn fall in love?Will her parent get a better relationship? Find out in this book."

So, it seems that this book will be a TravLyn fanfic; cool, cool, I'm fine with it, I'm not "messing with your ship."

I see that the main problem with the description, is the fact that some of the words are missing letters; Katelyn was spelt like kately; parents was spelled as in parent, or maybe that was just a grammatical error, not really sure.

Speaking of grammar, some of the grammar in the blurb is incorrect, too; "She had never fall in love," should be "She has never fallen in love," or something like that.

I advise you to have someone older proof read your story.

➵ c r e d i t s

As usual, they didn't credit Aphmau for the characters, but they did include her in the tags, and placed it under the right category.

Speaking of tags, can we speak about the tags in this book?

"aarmausucks" quite immature, don't you think?

"travlynislife" no, it isn't; oxygen, God [depends on your religion, really,] water, food, and other important resources are life.

"readthis" the child's guide to make someone read their book.

"bestbookever" I'm not even going to say anything about this.

I advise you to add tags that would be more related to the story, that's all.

➵ t i t l e 

The title isn't the most creative; change it to something like, "In The Eyes of The Blue-Haired Beauty" or something like that, I'm not the best person for names. 

➵ s t o r y

The first chapter is an intro, but not like a prologue, but like, "Oh hey dis mah first book srry if it's bad u can leave if you want k?" [not exactly like that, actually written out better, but you get the point]

 Based on the other chapter they've posted, it looks like it's pretty okay, other than the fact that there are multiple grammatical errors spread across the work, like the difference between "then" and "than," etc.

Again, I recommend having someone proof-read your books before posting them.

➵ s u m m a r y

1.) Have someone spell-check/proof-read your stories and works.

2.) Make an original cover; you can look for free cover requests or make one on your own.

3.) Have a more original title, something more unique and interesting.

4.) Credit Aphmau and fix up the tags a tad bit.

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As usual, I have to remind everyone that this is a critique; this is not a means to bully you, but a way to help you improve.

So, signing off,

_hannecho_