So, for today's critique, we have...

"Alone..." by ZaneShadowNinja

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➵ c o v e r

The cover is acceptable, even if it is just an image. Images are fine as covers, so not much to worry about there, but there's still room for improvement.

You could add some text, but make sure to choose a lively font, or a font that would fit with the title.

➵ b l u r b / d e s c r i p t i o n

I think the blurb lacks a bit of punctuation; specifically, commas.

"Zane was always alone in his childhood he was hated because of the demon inside no one cared if the Lords were his parents.He wondered why he was treated like this he found out when he was 12 he hated everyone that hated him and that hate fed the demon inside to take over now he's locked away forever... and he's all alone..."

So, that was the blurb. It just needs a few commas, and I think it'd be fine.

It wouldn't be the best description, but it's acceptable.

➵ c r e d i t s

It isn't in the right category. They placed it in the "Random" category, when rather it should be in the "FanFiction" category, considering they are using the characters made by someone else, and is part of a fandom.

Following the category, they didn't credit Aphmau for the characters; most importantly, Zane.

➵ t i t l e

It's not that creative, okay? There are tons of other books out there with the same name, but I've got to hand it to you; adding three dots made it more unique than without them, so, yeah.

I'll give you an example of a good title, that's very unique;

"Blue Fire, Blinding Darkness" by Dragon_Breather

I enjoy that title, very much, and it would be great if you could get a more interesting title that supports the plot.

➵ s t o r y

It's... okay. I'll give it a pass.

Again, at some points, they miss commas, but other than that, it's fine.

Also, it's quite... edgy. But, I guess I can't blame you; a lot of "Zane AU/Backstory" FF's are quite edgy, so, I'd like to add a teeny bit of happiness into the story.

➵ s u m m a r y

1.) Add some text in the cover.

2.) Input some commas, and other punctuation marks [ex. :, ;, ., etc.]

3.) Credit Aphmau for the characters.

4.) Change the category of the book, from "Random," to "FanFiction."

5.) Try to add a more interesting and unique title.

6.) TRY not to make it too edgy, that it seems bland.

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Please, remember, this is not an attack, as I fear you might take it that way. We do this to help you improve, not to attack you and make you feel worse.

So, again, signing off,