Editor: Beth (MicroscopicLlama)

Client: squidplantz

Work: Supergene

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You're a great writer! I thought the story was funny, the characters were well developed, and found the plot interesting and original. 

 When editing it, I noticed you tend to use too many words in your sentences, however that could easily be fixed by going over what you write. My suggestion to fix the structure of your sentences would be to read it out loud and if it sounds like a mouthful then you should probably edit it down.

The grammar/punctuation was, honestly, quite good. There were a few minor errors here and there regarding your punctuation around quotations, as well as remembering to not go too heavy with the commas. Otherwise, there wasn't many typos or plot holes. 

 Overall, I think that you're a good writer and should definitely continue with the book. It was great to edit for you : )