As @MatiDemers didn't get much of a critique the last time, it's only fair he gets a redo.

Rule Reminder:

- Read the TWO chosen chapters of The Prime Book: The Duoy Document by @MatiDemers and have one DETAILED comment on EACH chapter on what you like and what should be improved.

- Respect the feedback number

- Effort Book is decided by the author as the best commenter this week and will receive a ONE chapter critique of their choice

Prime Book: The Duoy Document

Critique Number: 5

Chapters: Prologue and Chapter One

Due Date: Sunday 24th April