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Second Review!!!

I hope everyone knows that I'm being the nicest, honest person right now. Lol, My goal is not to insult, it's to spread enlightenment. Hahahaah*wipes tears* Honestly, it's for my personal amusment, and I enjoy having victims lol

LET BEGINS!!!!

Right off the bat, the dialogue brings me in. It's fancy, filled with big words to make reach for my dictionary, it's simple and compelling. In honestly this writing style, is far closer to my own style. Lol *Smirks* Competition.... *Cracks fingers* Must destroy!!!

The opening about the flight and rain, I enjoyed it...somewhat *frowns* it builds the lovely melancholy scene that makes me smile, as it feels as if rain is brushing my cheek...ahahah (See my flowery words!!Praise ME!)

AHAH! Mistake... "His face is long face..." (Don't worry it happens to the best of us, *snickers*)

I love how she lets the readers fill in with imagination, some writerS enjoy telling you every, little thing and some love leaving absolutely everything to your imagination, (poets) but she gives enough to set up the scene, and then she plopps it on you to imagine it. GOOD JOB WEEPER!!

I HATE IT, IHATEIT, IHATEIT!!! I love how she writes, OMG...THIS IS GROSS. The scene flows so well, it's insulting that I even have been requested to actually review this.UGH!

The teen angst, and hidden secrets and different aunt...I'm sorry but um, *stares at author* Why aren't you published yet, so that I may make fun of you? This is the exact stuff you see hanging from the teen section of books...what could make this better? The main character being black ahahaha lol, (yeah I would love it fifteen thousand, billions light years more for that but, we write what we know.)

Like, this is maddening!! She opened well, then it's flowing fast enough to keep my interest, and there are minimal mistakes...oh GAHD, STOP IT!! It's oozing on me.

One of the reasons this story may only have 478, is because the writer has tooo many tags...Just General fiction in the bar place, then the tags Teen and Hurt, Comfort. That should do, right now your story is competing in too many slots. *Winks* try it!!

Oh maybe a more Teen focus like cover, something fantasy like.

Sorry the tags should be... General Fiction, New Adult, and HurtandComfort

...I AM NOT REVIEWING THIS ANY MORE!!           

I can't do it, if I do I'll spend this entire chapter talking about how good it is, and how realistic the characters are, and blech!! I am not some trophy wife reviewer!!!

This story is perfect for being on the plane, especially if you're headed to paris. I don't understand why it doesn't have a million reviews, I'm a thousand kind of girl, but this story isn't bad or boring it's right up my alley.

Should you only listen to me?! YES, YEAAS HONEY!! You all better check out this story!! And make your own judgments lol but seriously everyone should at least read the first chapter.

AND PARIS WEPT

Go check  this wonderful piece of writing out!!